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Language is way too crude, a lot of modern american swearing, to the point the writer is almost making Minerva look like a thug.

I love Steven talking about being too old to jump out of perfectly good airplanes. I immediately thought about of this from “heartbreak Ridge’:

Swede Johanson: Gunny, I'm afraid of heights.
Highway: So am I.
Swede Johanson: You are?
Highway: Jumping out of a perfectly good aircraft is not a natural act. So let's do it right, enjoy the view. Come on

I like the way you keep the raids fresh. Love Moody joining up, even at Harry’s expense.

TGM

this was a great story, though the ending felt a bit rushed. couldve used another chapter to more conclusively end it with a little more detail.

12 years late, but the comment still stands. The gallery was 50 FOOT off the courtroom floor? the most it could be in any court or large room would be 10 feet, enough for plenty of headroom for people to pass beneath. It is a good story though.

This might be one of my favorite Peggy Sue Harry fics. Beautifully written, and wonderful characterization with the people, not to mention the fantastic character analyses from you, especially regarding Dumbledore and Snape. Great freaking job!

One of the few stories I read again. Excellent.

I hope all is well.
Family of Heroes had an excellent start and I’m looking forward to Harry joining the story.
The End and the Beginning is a favorite and I always enjoy rereading it.

Chapter - 3

So Snape has a bad home life as a student, of course it's better than before for him to murder innocents. Lol!

Going to agree with others that the ending was too abrupt. And I'm not talking about the short flight scene, that part was fine. The main antagonist was Harry and Hermione's inability to truly live while Voldemort existed. You needed to show the pay off all that suffering and hard work in a manner more than a basic wedding scene of about a 100 words. For being all about H/Hr, you short changed the end of their story.

Pretty sure the axle grease prank, even ignoring the weight issue, would possibly kill Draco. Especially since it couldn't be cleaned with magic. I'm guessing it would prevent the skin from breathing, like how some actors have died due to body paint. They'd have to get it off him before he went into shock (unless magicals are immune to that kind of thing of course)

Excellent story! Very well sritten.

I thoroughly enjoyed this!

I loved every second of it

The piss joke made me laugh so hard XDDDDDDD lol I love your writing and this is the first actual fanfic i read of Harry potter. It inspired me to start my own fic one day