|Reviews for Intimidating|
| goldfishlover73 chapter 1 . 4/9/2010
"We...just had sex up against Mustang's office door."
That, I have to say was the best line in the whole thing.
Constructive Critism: describe more instead of just telling. Like when you said "This turned Havoc on even more" you should describe it, like say he moaned or...something...just something to think about.
And put a *flashback* or something in there, because I had no idea what was going on after I started reading the second part. Try to indicate that it was in the past.
Once again, just some food for thought. Very nice overall.
| little miss clueless chapter 1 . 3/23/2010
Hot...very veryy HOT! Love it!
| SpecialDreamin chapter 1 . 3/12/2010
I LOVE THIS COUPLE. I have to write my own...
And I thought Royai was cute. Man, little did I know...
| Samantha Rice chapter 1 . 3/3/2010
i loved it! _
| ForgetfulMind26 chapter 1 . 3/2/2010
WHEW! It's getting hot up in dis piece.
-fangirl squee- So...erm.. yes.. I will use the word. S.E.X.Y.