|Reviews for The Old War|
| MisterSP chapter 7 . 1/27/2013
| I-En-Tee-Jay chapter 7 . 12/23/2010
Ouch, poor guy, striken by the Eye of The White Devil.
Awesome Story, it's a great start, poor Fate, though the mental communication was pretty damn funny.
Great start, I really Hope you continue this story.
| Golden Lark chapter 7 . 4/21/2010
Selryam: "But I did experience a few qualms with the battle scenes."
Noted and acknowledged. In my own defense, I see Signum as a master of more or less all-out one on one combat. She (and to a lesser degree, all the Wolkenritter) are thrown off their game a bit by non-lethal capture operations. They aren't ripping out linker cores these days. In an actual fight she would have killed that guy in the blink of an eye, no questions asked. What was actually happening was more of a "I can't just kill him, so I have to let him make the first move and counter appropriately." With her style, anything direct that is less powerful than a full lethal onslaught on an unknown foe (that successfully took out Fate somehow) is likely to get her killed. I don't even think she uses bind spells (unless my memory fails?). She was buying time for Zaphira to get there, while trying to get a quick surrender.
She also got no 'intent to kill' from the teleportation spell, so it didn't click as fast as it would have for an attack. Ah well. The Rein bit I have no excuse for. I am not sure how quickly and how powerfully she casts solo in canon. At the very least I promise you Signum will have her day.
| Selryam chapter 7 . 4/17/2010
Sauron imagery connected to Nanoha? It's like injecting distilled Awesome. An added bonus to this already wonderful story.
The well thought-out logistics stuff really appeals to me/was quite impressed with it. I spent a couple of minutes myself thinking about the way the Yin/Yang teams were split up, and found the conclusions good and logical. And I liked the search itself, with the methodical, militaristic communication and stuff. So now you know that at least someone appreciates that mental effort ).
Also generally impressed with the mechanics. That 'communicate by feelings' scene was really clever and fun. (Tentative greeting? LOVE/TRUST/ADORE! (lololol))
But I did experience a few qualms with the battle scenes. Tiny things, like that Signum failed to notice the spinning thingie, or that the target had enough time to slump, sigh, and mutter half a sentence before getting attacked, or that Rein sputtered out a few words before going to the spell. Very minor, but I'm nitpicky about that sort of thing when it comes to experienced fighters like these guys.
Anyway, my general response is overwhelmingly positive. I look forward to more from you!
| Lance58 chapter 7 . 3/17/2010
| Karai-san chapter 7 . 3/17/2010
I don't know what to say at the end..ahaha..that was a little funny..the end I mean..XDpoor "he".."he" already surrendered but still frightened with signum..anyway..i wanna ask something,will this have hmm..lime/lemon whatever they call it?hmm..i reaally hope it will not but i wanna ask...i well..hate those that's why I want to ask now so that I won't have to worry in the future..ahaha(it means i'll stop reading if it will have so pls?ahaha..)
| GeshronTyler chapter 6 . 3/14/2010
Hey, nifty! So, we've got some (presumably) Al Hazardian warrior/artificail lifeform that got released from some kind of stasis prison (and very interesting that Higher has some idea of who/what our Anatagonist is), so far hasn't killed anyone, but apparently is looking for a "Shmidt" (some kind of agent of ancient justice?), and presumably gains some kind of information when he/it disrupts linker cores.
I like the characterizations, and Hayate's internal dialogues and musings, and that of the other characters. "That Thing", eh? _
Looking forward to more.
| crazyidiot78 chapter 6 . 3/13/2010
I loved the bit with Signum and her lack of flair. "They surrended to that thing but not her" priceless. keep up the good work.
| Lance58 chapter 5 . 3/9/2010
| Honulicious chapter 5 . 3/8/2010
well, i don't think it would be a good story with out the details and explanations. as complicated as this story is, this chapter is needed. i enjoyed reading hayate's thoughts...she is the genius...not fate ;P fate just has a one track mind. and i like how you put that bit in about fate protecting nanoha without limits. but is it then safe to put Arf out in the field? hmm hopefully she doesn't get hurt. i still think you put in a little humor...handcuffing nanoha to hayate (figuratively not literally ;P) haa anyway, keep on writing!
| Honulicious chapter 4 . 3/6/2010
hmm so many questions...well update soon!
nanoha getting wet! haa
| shamanic demonator chapter 3 . 3/6/2010
Omg nanoha must be so upset... Keep up the updates :D Ur like the fastest update-r ever :D
| Obssesed Nuker chapter 3 . 3/5/2010
Nanoha's smiling almost non-stop...
A not-quite-happy smile...
That's a BAD thing!
| Honulicious chapter 3 . 3/4/2010
ha ARF IS AWESOME! itch...butt! haa that was so funny i burst out laughing. i love fate and arf. kinda sad about what happened to nanoha...i'm glad fate feels guilty about that. i hope they do make up!
| Honulicious chapter 2 . 3/4/2010
ah i'm a bit confused who's feelings were being expressed. can u make fate bold or nanoha underlined...i think all that was from 2 different people...anyway, cool idea!