|Reviews for May and His December|
| reve2weaver chapter 1 . 1/18/2011
I am enchanted by your brave topic on the surprising story of what if. I laughed at Edward's tantrum: “One can only take so many yuletides of solitude accompanied by a Sid Vicious soundtrack before one breaks. For me, that number was forty.”
It was funny and then strangely compelling with smokes butted out on banisters and Emmett with Julia wood. And then, oh my, most surprising of all was this sweet and very sad ending.
| That70sshowlova chapter 1 . 1/15/2011
This was amazingly funny and awesome. Good job. :D
| tee hill chapter 1 . 1/15/2011
I'd like to get to know them a little more please :)))
| denverpopcorn chapter 1 . 1/11/2011
I don't recall ever reading a fic that started with the HEA and left me with the heartfail of good angst.
This was brilliant. Lovely premise and excellent writing. Man, what a nice way to spend my time.
Oh...mothlights sent me...she's pimping you on twitter.
| sahlamari chapter 1 . 1/10/2011
Absolutely fantastic story! You developped a very believable "old Bella" evolving canon Bellas' character and allowing for the changes that age and an unhappy life would bring.
I've already added this story in my favorites and will look for anything else you may have writen. Thanks for sharing this with us!
| mothlights chapter 1 . 1/9/2011
I saw this over on ADF, when I was taking another look at 'Nomads', but I came over here to review so I could add it to favorites. It wins hands down as my favorite Twi one shot. And actually I'd put it in my top five Twifics of any length.
I've pulled out some fav lines, but you had me at "The first time I see the love of my life she's carrying an unused colostomy bag..." The fact that neither meets the other's expectation of being repulsed takes it beyond humor, and their voices are crystal clear.
I laughed out loud at all of the following:
* Emmett, my only ally, stands behind her, grinning with approval. "HOT," he mouths.
* jerking off to old episodes of Masterpiece Theatre
* the girl has the hands of an anorexic midget.
* Man looked like an eagle with anger-management issues.
* and instead uses his utensils to make forts out of his mashed potatoes, likely some subconscious throwback to his Civil War days
* "You have the head of an elephant above your fireplace," she remarks.
* "Then aren't you a bit too old to put forth so much effort pissing off your parents?"
You take a turn with this: "Suddenly, this becomes less hilarious than I'd anticipated as I watch Bella fidget. She's nervous...clutches that dilapidated purse of hers for dear life" and it's more than humor again.
The interaction between ExB is terrific in that they seem to think they know how the other will react, but have these moments where they figure out that they're not dismissing one another, thinking they know them when they don't. "Squashing her Aesop bullshit before it can begin, I tell her, "You and me, lady…we're not kindred spirits. Don't pity me for thinking I'm like you." - "Pity?" she scoffs. "You're rich, pretty, youthful…and you've already mastered what I've strived to accomplish my entire life. Why would someone like me pity you?" - I fight the urge to pat her head. "You pity yourself instead, then?" - "Don't patronize me."
Great job with the family. You're a little harsh with them in places (particularly Alice, which makes her appearance at the end even stronger) and it keep this from veering into too Cullen uber sweetness. Characterizations are sharp and quick.
Loved this small bit with Rosalie, and the way that old, abrupt Bella gets along with the vamp least likely to have approved of her in H.S. Women never compliment my icy, narcissistic sister, but apparently Bella never got that memo. - "Real?" Bella asks. - "Damn straight," Rose answers.
Also loved these:
She's joking, but I'm suitably depressed. It's starting to feel a lot like Christmas.
"You think I'm cute?" - "Honey, everyone does."
And you got me here - When I look closely at her, I can see the shadow of Bella the girl, Bella the optimist.
You managed to pack in a lot about dying, cynicism, having someone know you, and lost chances. I love that it's too late for this Edward who's never been in love to even realize exactly what he's missing, and we don't have him 'bemoaning his eternal fate'
Brilliant last line.
I'm going to assume you get that I like this.
| RaquelnJake chapter 1 . 1/4/2011
OMG, this was fabulous! I want to cry...
| Shadow Lighthawk chapter 1 . 1/3/2011
I don't, as a general rule, read twilight fic. There are a few (a very few) gems, with the plot and characterization and good, deep thinking about what's right and wrong with the canon, but I have found twific, on the whole, insipid. This fic is not twific on the whole. This is one of the gems. It's an intriguing and though-provoking tale of missed connections finally made, poignant and regretful, but not nearly as angsty as I feared it would be.
I think the thing that impresses me most is that you *went there*. People in general and twifans especially are not eager to confront old age. They're good with mortality - death and blood and gore and immortal undeath, yay! - but old age? Not so much. When you get into Twilight and the element of romance is added, old age becomes almost taboo. I find it fascinating and a little sad that that's the case, but it really is. I would have passed right over this fic, but the idea of old!Bella intrigued me. That and I really love the title. I'm a sucker for a good title.
You did both the title and the idea proud, I'm happy to say. I think you did a fantastic job of indirectly addressing our society's views about and feelings toward old age and death, both from a "younger" person's perspective and from an older person's perspective as well. The line about when Edward first saw the love of his life and what they were both looking for in each others' eyes was incredibly telling.
I thought the way you characterized Bella was exquisitely poignant at times. It makes me wonder what my grandmother felt in the last years of her life. She lived in a nursing home, too. An upscale one, certainly, and my dad visited her every day (literally), but still a nursing home. It still *smelled* like a nursing home. The way Bella talked about her roommate, about her life in that place (such as it was)... It makes me think, which is surely one of the goals of any decent piece of fiction.
The other thing I like about Bella's character is the way you presented her. I can still see some of the fearlessness and forthrightness from her canon character, but it's tempered by age and attenuated by the long years of a frankly mediocre life. I think that despite the occasional OOC and and a wee bit of ridiculousness in your portrayal of Esme and Alice (they were a little parodic, you have to admit), you were remarkably true to canon with this fic. I know that wasn't really your intention, but that makes it an even more amazing accomplishment.
I enjoyed reading this very much, and I would recommend it to anyone looking for twific that is both thoughtful and readable. Excellent work!
| Smittenwhenbitten chapter 1 . 12/18/2010
I know it started out being funny, and it was. But I shef a tear or two at the end. Worth reading.
| Jcook169 chapter 1 . 12/11/2010
I would hate to meet my soul mate right before one of us died.
Good story though.
| GoldenRat chapter 1 . 12/7/2010
Very interesting premise. I liked the characterizations.
| Crying Ivy chapter 1 . 12/1/2010
Absolutely loved it.
| gegege900 chapter 1 . 11/29/2010
best twilight. ever
| lullaby369 chapter 1 . 11/28/2010
Wow...completely depressing and though provoking. I loved it!
| LSRP chapter 1 . 11/22/2010
Awesome writing, but I got to say it is a rather depressing story. Loved it.