|Reviews for Again? Hell, NO! But|
| Gleas chapter 1 . 8/16
The dialogue needs to have more nuances... like a bit of physical cues and little less of jumping around issues... incorporate meaningful pauses, expressive facial expressions and other tics people have
Other than that, I seem to have a problem with Harry saying 'dears' to house elves... I mean I rather think he'd say 'mates' or something similar, 'dears' is just so overly feminine and just so not right... oh well.
Over all a good premise for the fic...
| Vegasman59 chapter 10 . 1/21
Great story Loved every minute
| Vegasman59 chapter 6 . 1/20
Here in the USA its pulling his head out of his behind, its called reach down between your legs grab your ears and pull until you hear a loud POP! In Rons case it might be akin to a nuclear explosion, Now that he is the son of the MoM It might be him saying when my father hears about this.
| MrsH chapter 10 . 1/18
Thanks for sharing your interesting take on the "Harry goes back in time" story. Aside from minor grammar and spelling errors that should have been caught by a beta, the story was well written and well told.
Very enjoyable - thanks!
| Schnuff chapter 6 . 11/1/2014
I stop midway through this chapter cause i don't see a point in reading more. The first chapters were (sorry) without any real emotion told from different persons (most times Remus POV).
The part with the resurrection of every ever killed person by Voldemort was...BAD. The part with the trials was...BAD.
Why? Wouldn't there a public outcry if the dead now walking again? Wouldn't Dumbledore and every Deatheater just know that now is the time to disappear? And quit frankly i must confess that i have read just too many stories were Amalia Bones just saves the day. Don't you think its a little bit off? I mean she is a ministry employee. Got her position because the oh so corrupt Fudge gave her the position...there is no prove at all that she wasn't one of those you could bribe (or do you think that Fudge wouldn't fill the only post that could possible endanger his corruption with one of his men/women?).
And what about this all powerful Dumbledore? His only protection is an antidote? After he saw what they did with Malfoy?
| X chapter 1 . 10/15/2014
First person, present tense. Not a popular format for most readers to begin with - and then you make it from a relatively minor character's pov as well? I'm sure this story would have done MUCH better if you had followed the more popular third person, past tense format.
| hojosatoko chapter 4 . 9/13/2014
It was pleasant to read, in some ways.
Idea is nice, but,
To! Many! Exclamation! Points! In! Every! Paragraph!
| MWRANDOM chapter 8 . 8/20/2014
I'm liking this story. One issue that I seem to be having with it though is that something about the way it is being written in first person view and present tense is causing it to be a lttle dry. Due to the tense and viewpoint it's reading more like the character is telling us about the scene happening rather than us actually seeing the character interact in the scene. The plot is good (even if a few things are a stretch due to their being so convienient) and there are few spelling/grammar issues, so it is a pretty good story. I can't really say it's a favorite due to the previously mentioned issue, but it's good enough to make me want to see if you have written anything else.
| tkepner chapter 1 . 8/13/2014
Regarding multiple vs single POV:
Saying you HAVE to have multiple POVs to tell a story, especially a short novel, merely means that you are not good enough as a writer to tell a full story from a single POV - or you are just taking the lazy, easy way out.
Notice that Star Trek TOS and TNG, for example, appear to have multiple POVs but in reality, with the exception of one episode, everything that is said or done is something that the Captain would have recorded in his daily "log" as having been reported to him by an underling, or something that he could have inferred as having happened with reasonable accuracy. In fact, one could argue that the POV of Star Trek _IS_ the Captain's Log and that all the adventures are actually being read from the log at a later time by someone at Star Fleet headquarters.
Next time you write a story, try telling it from a single POV where actions not seen or heard by the main character COULD have been reported to him later by someone else and the story is taking place as if he were telling it to someone else many years later - not that that is happening.
| Red Phoenix Dragon chapter 1 . 5/22/2014
10. A very enjoyable Harmony story with a sad beginning of a lost future to a return age 8 3/4 to a future no one could have imagine so good.
Good imagination for all the background stories and the extent of the evil of Dumbledore's interference and his terrible greater good.
Thank you for sharing your story. Please continue to write.
| csheila chapter 10 . 4/7/2014
Great story. Well written and plotted. Thought provoking as well.
ignore critics who claim unrealistic. It could apply to most of canon. At least u didn't heap misery every other chapter (bordering in pornographic due to the sadism)
Stepping off soapbox. Thanks for sharing
| MSgt SilverDollar chapter 5 . 1/29/2014
You handled Dumbassadork in an outstanding way good going!
What's worse for Bumblebore the fact he's gone to Azkaban or that the truth came out? I still find it difficult to believe that JKR never outed Dumbles as a child abusing, senile, manipulative old bastard.
| MSgt SilverDollar chapter 3 . 1/28/2014
If all the DEs got to jail poor Dumbles won't be able to reform them. I hope Snape gets his comeuppance soon.
I like your premise of how Lily and James came back and the fact that they are back. I've seen it done differently and it worked also. Check out Not Normal by Radaslab and how he brought them back.
Good story keep up the good work and tell flamers to PISS OFF.
| V. L. Crawford chapter 2 . 12/14/2013
I wasn't expecting James and lily and the rest to come back. I thought Sirius and remus were going to be the ones taking care of Harry this time.
| V. L. Crawford chapter 1 . 12/14/2013
Wow! This was a great chapter.