I would have pushed him away
Lol

I think the spy was someone Edward crushed on
He got butt hurt and sketchy
I would have asked why did you initiate a search and then be mean to me ?
Thansk

Stories that talk about how powerful she should be and still make her the damsel is distress all the time get tiring

I Forgot I read this way back when. But my review needs some work, so I came back to do some spelling and grammar corrections on my original review.

PLEASE SEE THE CORRECTIONS BELOW...

I stuck through it. This story really ended for me the moment Bella 'allowed' herself to get captured to make the rest of your plot 'work'. But it should've ended way before. It should've ended when I realized you were going with the absolute watered-down version of everyone's abilities.

Let us start at the top...

EMMETT: First and most importantly, we must stop the tomfoolery and say concretely that this 'Genius', is NO genius:

His big 'invention' - a version of Bluetooth, was first made available in 1998. This story was first up in 2010. A little google search could've helped here, but back to the 'Bluetooth'. Given the type of vehicles they can afford, anyone of their so-called 'high-end' models would have this tech built in. So "inventing" a way to use the phone in the car so that he can talk and drive safely was an eye-rolling joke. SMGDH. Plus, even before Bluetooth was invented, you had Aux cords. Most high-end phones (blackberry) had them. And after you picked up a call, they were pretty much hands-free after that.

Also I think it should be mentioned that true genius lies in creativity, NOT in the ability to follow a blueprint or instruction manual. If following instructions was all that was needed to be labeled a genius then a factory worker working on an assembly line following his instructions could be considered a 'genius' by your definition. So can the furniture assembler guy working at IKEA. LOL

Emmett's so-called genius comes from instructions. Instructions that came from blueprints that manifest in his mind. Blueprints of things already in existence. And as I've stated before, just following step-by-step instructions does NOT make one a genius!

Oh, an he put in an alarm system... (Roll my eyes.)Soooooooo?!

ROSE: Her ability to project herself, like many of your other character's abilities, missed its potential. Honestly... From what you could've done with her to what you actually did, her character had me asking... "Besides being snippy at Bella, snarky at the group, and smacking Emmett behind his head. What is she here for again? More transparent and easily avoidable/ dismissable drama? Yeah... that sounds about right"

JASPER: Same old thing... you did what every fanfic writer I've read has done with him. Give his power an honorable mention. A lazy demonstration, then basically write it off. Never to be truly useful again after that.

He himself could've been written off if he wasn't so badly needed to play his role as Alice's boyfriend.

Alice: Again... Perky, annoying, and permanently useless! Like many authors, Alice always, always, seems to be blind or confused about what her vision might mean riiigggghhhttt when the author needs her to be. How else can she miss so much, so conveniently for the writer? hmm?

With all she should've been able to see, I still haven't figured out HOW she missed Felix and Demetri NOT getting on the plane. NOT renting/stealing a car. NOT getting a kidnap kit ready for any member of the Cullen family they find alone. And NOT get wind that all of that was the plan in the first place!

Even if they were ordered to, they are known to Alice! And she was monitoring them. Yet she missed all of that, and Bella ended up Kidnapped.

I mean, look at the list...How many fricking decisions were in that kidnap attempt?! And Alice didn't catch one? (ROLL my eyes!)

What obvious abuse and attempt to write around the rules of a character you did as an author to make that ridiculous plot play out. SMGDH You really wanted your readers to lower their IQ's just to get away with that blatant manipulation of the rules you originally setup. Or you wanted us to just overlook it and pat you on the back just for writing us another chapter? SMH. But I couldn't do it. Sorry.

Edward: Okay, talent-wise, you did a better job on him than most. You were more consistent with the rules/laws of his gift than most others. But there were moments where I had to ask myself how does he not know that already. Those moments were very few and the situations were all minor to the plot, but they were there. (See playful actions between him and Alice for some examples.)

Edward's gift aside, he was like how everyone else made him. An Emo, destined the fuck up everything because he can't get a handle on his mouth or emotions. And for someone who can read minds... he sure misjudges and gets alot of people wrong.

And Last but not least, BELLA. Jesus Christ! SMGDH. This character was an up, down, left, right, complete idiot! I get that she didn't 'live that life' but for fuck sake, even after so many monster-sized clues, she kept standing around waiting for someone to explain further. Like Bit-h Keep up! Stop standing there with your mouth open looking like a drooling idiot. Man, what a dizzy twit she was.

And don't get me started on all the things she/you could've done with the little bit of power she had but didn't. There was NO creativity with her AT ALL! I wondered why you even bothered with it if you knew it was going to get in the way of the plot...*cough, cough... sorry, I meant 'Your Genius'. Because you giving it to her character and then writing around it, showed me you must've never picked up a comic book in your LIFE! You had no imagination AT ALL. In every situation I saw Bella in I thought of 10 very BASIC and small things she could've done. Shhheeeeeiiitttttt one obvious thing she could've done was Darth Vader the fuqh out of everyone, and just started telekinetically choking mofos. Buutttt she was an idiot and had no creativity, so none of that happened.

And I have to ask...HOW IN THE HELL Was she able to get kidnapped AT ALL? She got spooked and instead of putting up her SHIELD, the thing GUARANTEED to keep her safe, SHE CALLS CHARLIE? Do you mean to tell me, she has enough 'concentration' to see a car come to a screeching halt, bad guys popping out, then in all her low IQ wisdom, decide to do something that requires 3 steps instead of something that require a single-THOUGHT?! Really? Really?

SMGDH.

If 'writers' can't write with characters with abilities, THEN DON'T USE THEM! Leave the abilities for those with 'IMAGINATION!' ... It's really that simple! Because look at the size of these ridiculous plot holes that you had to create trying to 'force' this story to work. It was all ridiculous.

#justsaying

I’m enjoying their different talents.

AWESOME ! I've just found you from a rec on a story I was reading and I'm so glad I was able to read this amazing story ;) Have you thought about making a sequel for it ? ;) Thanks so much for keeping it posted ;D

I stuck through it. This story really ended for me the moment Bella 'allowed' herself to get captured to make the rest the plot 'work'. But it should've ended way before. It should've ended when i realized you were going with the absolute watered-down version of everyone's abilities.

Lets start at the top...

EMMETT is NO genuis: His big 'invention' - aka Bluetooth. Was available in 1998. This story was first up in 2010. And given the type of vehicles they can afford, anyone of their so called 'high-end' models would have it. So inventing a way to use the phone in his car so that he can continue to drive safely was an eye rolling joke. SMGDH. Even before Bluetooth was Aux cords. Most high end phones (blackberry) had them. ANd after you picked up... they were pretty much hands-free after that. Also, genius lies in creativity, Not following the blueprint of existing creation. If that was the case, a factory worker on an assembly line following his instruction could be considered a 'genius' by your can the 'assembler' guy at IKEA. Lol Emmett just following info that comes to his head does NOT a genius make! Oh an he put in an alarm system... (Roll my eyes.)Soooooooo?!

ROSE: Her abilitly to project herself, like many of your other characthers abilities, missed its potential. Honestly... From what you could've done with her to what you actually did, her character had me asking..."Besides to be snippy at Bella, snarky at the group, and smack Emmett behind his head. What is she here for again? More transparent and easily avoidable/ dismissable drama? Yeah... that sounds about right"

JASPER: Same old... you did what every fanfic writer i've read has done with him. Give his power an honorable mention. A lazy demonstration... then basically write it off. His gift never to be truly useful again. He himself could've been written off, if he wasn't sooo badly needed to play his role as Alice's guy.

Alice: Again... Perky, annoying, and always useless, blind, or wrong riiigggghhhttt when the author needs her to be. FOr I still haven't figured out HOW she missed Felix and Demetri NOT getting on the plane, NOT renting/stealing a car, NOT getting a kidnap kit ready for any member of the Cullen family they find alone, and NOT get wind that all of that was the plan in the first place! Even if the were ordered to... they are know to her and had minor decision to make. I mean...How many fricking decisions was in that?! (ROLL my eyes!)What obvious abuse you did as an author to make that ridiculouness play out. SMGDH Why is she useful to anyone again?

EDward: Okay, talent-wise... you did a better job on him than most. You were more consistant with the rules/laws of his gift than most others. But there were moments where I had to ask myself... how does he 'not' know that already? They were very few and the situations were all minor to the plot, but they were there. (See playful actions between him and Alice.) Gift aside... he was like how everyone else made him. An Emo, destined the fuck up everything because he cant get a handle on his mouth or emotions. And for someone who can read minds... he sure gets a lot of people wrong.

And Last but not least BELLA. Jesus christ. This character was up, down, left, right, complete idiot! I get that she didn't 'live that life' but for fuck sakes... even after monster clues, she kept standing around waiting for someone to explain further. Like Bit-h! Keep up! Stop standing there with your mouth open looking like a drooling idiot. Man what a twit she was.

And don't get me started on All the things she/you could've done with the little bit of power she had but didn't. There was NO creativity with her or that AT ALL! I wondered why you even bothered with it, if you knew it was going to get in the way of the plot. Because you trying to use it or write around it showed me you must've never picked up a comic book in you LIFE! No imagination AT ALL. Every situation I saw Bella in I thought of 10 very BASIC and small things she could've done. Shhheeeeeiiitttttt she could be Darth Vadering everyone, and just choking mofo's. Buutttt she was written to an idiot so none of that happened. And I have to ask.. .HOW IN THE HELL Was she able to get kidnapped AT ALL? She got spooked and instead of putting up her SHIELD, the thing GUARANTEED to keep her safe, SHE CALLS CHARLIE? You mean to tell me, she has enough 'concerntration' to see a car come to a screeching halt, bad guy popping out, then decide to do something that requires 3 steps, instead of something that require a single-THOUGHT?! Really?

SMGDH.

If people can't write with or around characters with abilities, THEN DON'T USE THEM! leave the abilites for those with 'IMAGINATION!' ...Simple! Because look at the size of these ridiculous plot holes that you had to create, trying to 'force' this story to work. It was all ridiculous.

#justsaying

Honestly Bella sounds like a true idiot about herself. I'm with Edward. she cant be that naive.

Beautiful fanfic, thanks

Loved it.

Rosalie was so out of line. Why doesn’t anyone correct her? I’m glad Edward stood up for Bella but the others should have too. They let her be so rude to Bella and make excuses.

I would find it so frustrating how they're talking about her as if she's not there, talking over her, and just expecting how to know what they're talking about as if they didn't just pluck her out of obscurity. Have they only been around each other for so long that they don't know how to deal with other people? The laughing is irritating too, almost as bad as the hostility from Edward and Rose. They only know so much about their own gifts and the Volturi because they have each other, and they only have each other because of Alice. Bella is handling it better than I would because I'd leave. I guess she doesn't have much of a choice.

Lol I'm glad Bella had Rose take a seat, she needed to. Must she be so rude? No need to be so smug either when Bella is not trying to be competitive. But c'mon, how did Bella not know what projection meant? It's not hard to figure out especially after Rose just appeared behind her.

i really liked this story! i've really been into supernatural stories lately and loved this! sad its over and was so short. i would have loved to see at least a little of their future together.

is there any edward pov? . if yes where can i find it
please help me