Reviews for Forbidden
Aqua Girl 007 chapter 1 . 9/10/2013
Aw, this is so cute. I love how you wrote everyone in this. Atem's actions and thoughts seem realistic since I can see him being conflicted about his feelings towards a "commoner" like Mana if he was taught that he was Horus his whole life.
AzTec999 chapter 1 . 6/8/2013
awwwww... so cute! faves! :) vaseshipping!
muviri chapter 1 . 6/10/2012
Sooooo cute!
Elficiel chapter 1 . 5/26/2011
After having read such a story, I'm just agape. How to put it in words...? It is an amazing story. I think this was one of the best characterizations of Atemu I've read. Although this being an AU, you captured his personality and behaviour during his days as a Pharaoh pretty well. It's perfectly understandable that having being taught his entire life of his godly role as a Pharaoh, Atemu would be pretty much conflicted over his emotions toward Mana. I've also loved the ending. Looks like he'd finally made his choice. :P

Thank you for sharing this.
Makena W chapter 1 . 9/13/2010
In your story you foccused more in their social positions and in the dificulties of them being together, it gave the story a great hint of the real ancient Egypt. Also, I loved Atemu's confusion about his feelings and the description of their moment in the throne's room. It was so cute! congrats
Hanqing chapter 1 . 7/14/2010
Aww, they're really sweet together. I liked how you had Atemu progress and develop as a person, as well as his inner conflict with Mana. :3
Isis 01 chapter 1 . 7/7/2010
Best Atem/Mana story I have read yet. You're right, most of the characters in Yu-Gi-Oh don't match very much with the whole aspect of Ancient Egypt. I liked your portrayal of Atem, so arrogant and princely at first, then confused with the feelings he's not used to. Keep it up.
Avitala chapter 1 . 4/17/2010
Very nice.

I liked how you wrote Atemu. You managed to keep him more or less nice, but still give him the aort of arogant 'I'm better than ALL of you' point of view that Pharaohs actually had. Good job! D
Dbl chapter 1 . 3/15/2010
What I like most about this is that it most definitely captures the spirit and feeling of the era in a very credible way-you really do have a talent for that, its very much like your 'Indebted' story. Atem I think is also written perfectly-I believe him, and his thoughts and reasoning seem very well-connected, like a chain reaction.

Favorite part:

"Love was pure—this felt like something was crawling under his skin, causing his blood to race or his entire body to perspire—and by the second time he had figured out that it was not dehydration, like he'd feared, but something else entirely, something much worse, because Atemu could not figure out how to make it stop tormenting him."

Oh, Atem. xD I like the humor that you manage to get in here as well.

A little too fluffy at the end for my taste, reminds me of the end of 'Pride and Prejudice' da movie... but yeah, I think you're very consistent, and I want to challenge you to vary it up a little! Humor, dark dramatic stories, do something different! But that's just a suggestion :) Really enjoyed this, thanks for writing it! :D
Velgamidragon chapter 1 . 3/10/2010
Oh, very nice. And very characteristic of how Pharaohs ruled in the Old Kingdom. But uh... Mana's eyes are aquamarine or dark green, not brown or any other similar shade.