Very good.

Oh I really loved this

Oooooooo. So gooood- I love these type of stories with outside observations about the Pevenies' return and hints as to what their life was like in Narnia growing up! EEe so good!

Ah, yes, poor, confused Mrs Pevensie.
Nice look at their mum's perspective on their changes. :-)

Ariel_of_Narnia

Yeah that was awsome i really like the friendship between the girls and Ed and his brother. this deserves a spot in my favorites list

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That was... wow. Really fantastic! Your description of the Pevensies was excellent, along with your characterisation of Helen. Loved it! :D

I think you should make her force the children to tell her what happened, then freak out and insist she be taken to Narnia and, well, I get lost there

This is wonderfully writen, I do hope there will be more chapters and that this isn't a one-shot. But if it is, then it is wonderful! Keep it up.

~NarniaQueen

::smiles softly:: This is beautiful, albeit a bit sad. I really like how you've characterized Helen and I especially like the ways you have her notice the changes in her children.

Well done!

Best Regards,

Sentimental Star