Reviews for Second Heart
Guest chapter 1 . 8/1
No next chapter? TvT
MRS. JASPHER WITHLOCK chapter 1 . 6/25/2013
as you can tell my i love your story and if you can write more i would be the first one to read it, and i just want to ask you can i use your idea of the second heart the only part i want to use "We were given two hands to hold, two legs to walk, two eyes to see, two ears to hear, but why only one heart? Because the other one was given to someone for us to find." and if you say no there want be no hard feeling i want to use in a twilight fanfiction. please get back to me as soon as possible.

thank you
ja ne
bellaboo2002 chapter 1 . 6/21/2013
Will there be more because I would love to read it.
Akirakun17 chapter 1 . 5/10/2013
Loved it! I seriously hope this wasn't a one-shot...if so then please let us have a sequel, its so cute. Their blomming love is the best, we get to see the beginning of something great and i really would like to read more.
I know some people are gonna b-tch and moan about the age thing but it says shouta in the summary so if they don't like it they leave.
Thanks for a great fic

Ja Ne _
SASUNARU chapter 1 . 2/14/2012
Hated Shouta fics...Until this!


Shame there isn't a squeal
cristalcat101 chapter 1 . 1/18/2012
Aw, this is so cute! I wish it was a two-parter to see them older! Well Naruto older. & their relationship CX
WesternBanshee chapter 1 . 1/7/2012
I like it
BitterSweet4137 chapter 1 . 8/15/2011
Cutest story ever. I love how you portray Sasuke's dominance and Naruto's willingness to comply with his controlling ways. And on top of it all your a great writer. Good job. :)
do-the-unthinkable chapter 1 . 8/12/2011
This definitely was an interesting read Although, I would have liked it a little more if Naru-chan was a little more...of age. It was a well written story in my opinion but the age difference kept me from enjoying it too much.

Good Job though, really.

abc chapter 1 . 5/27/2011
you do realize you wrote a story that made sasuke into a pedophile. masturbating a 12 year old boy along with himself- that's disgusting. why would you find pleasure in writing about young kids being sexually assaulted. and that's what it was. naruto was too naive and stupid to even know what sasuke was asking permission for.

it would be better if you changed naruto's age to 15 or 16_ have sasuke put him in school, get him tutors, etc...and when naruto turns 18- then he and sasuke can get to know each other 'better'.

sasuke waiting for naruto to mature would be the best way to show that he cares- be denying his own immediate satisfaction and doing what is best for naruto first.

if you insist on keeping in a story about a 12 year old boy and an adult masturbating- then put a warning in your summary- if you can write a whole story about it- you shouldn't be ashamed to mention it in your summary- unless you are ashamed?

it could have been better- i loved the whole concept of finding your other heart- the romance of it and the fate/destiny of it- but then you ruined with with kiddy porn
OO chapter 1 . 3/6/2011
I have to agree with the last reviewer. Love the idea of having a second heart, at least make him 15!
jj chapter 1 . 10/23/2010
i liked the whole idea of a 2nd heart and sasuke finding his. also liked sasuke rescuing naruto. the story would have been enjoyed if you had sasuke wait until naruto was of legal age. and you should warn the readers in your summary that your story involves a pedophile sasuke- underage sex. would it have been hard for you to write a story that doesn't involve sex with a child. it's disgusting you pervert_ you made naruto 12 years old but said he looked like a 9 year old_ so you're basically telling a story about a 22 year old sasuke having sex with a 9 year old naruto. i wouldn't have had to read it had you had the proper warning in your summary.
CHARbones chapter 1 . 9/19/2010
:P this is a one shot? Aw, oops. oh well. It's lovely... though I'm not really into shouta.
Ai Enmaxjigoku shoujo chapter 1 . 6/17/2010
That was so cute! This story should've gotten more reviews, tis a shame! I enjoyed it very much!
anonyyy chapter 1 . 6/14/2010
I loved it...but 12? ohmigawd. i actually feel dirty and ashamed for enjoying this story. please oh please raise the age to something minimummm
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