|Reviews for The Power?|
| Becks7 chapter 2 . 6/25/2011
Whoa! That's quite a twist there at the end! I hope you don't leave it there for long!
| Becks7 chapter 1 . 6/25/2011
Interesting start. Can't wait to see what Gaia has done with the fallen Planeteers!
| FossilQueen1984 chapter 2 . 6/6/2011
Holy fishpaste! What happened? Earth's champion is MIA, and the Planeteers are DOA, and Linka is pregnant! It's really a very good start, please update soon. BTW, could plase take a lokk at my CP fanfiction? :)
| starr1095 chapter 1 . 5/24/2010
O no that was a good first chapter loved it please update soon!
| OzQueene chapter 1 . 3/16/2010
This is off to an interesting start!
I have a couple of tips regarding grammar for you - though it's nothing too major. :)
"What do you mean" Duke said.
It should be:
"What do you mean?" Duke said. You could even use the word 'asked' instead of 'said', but that's not important.
You should also use commas to separate dialogue from the rest of the sentence.
Like instead of:
"I am getting to old for this" said Duke as he was surrounded.
It should be:
"I am getting too old for this," said Duke as he was surrounded.
Also remember to close your sentences and make sure all your grammar is in place.
It just makes things a little easier to read. But in regards to your storyline and descrption, everything is great so far! Your spelling is also totally fine.
I hope you update again soon. :)