Reviews for Lost in HopeForever
Sinergy chapter 1 . 7/30/2010
Its a nice short story about a teenages life with a sudden twist and the hardship that follows, but you still have to work on how certain characters express their emotions, especially the part where Goergia finally meets her father (she didnt see her father for 3-4 years and so much happend while he was gone, and then she tells him his wife died...), another thing is that you should work on your paragraphs(making them more noticible) and I also noticed that you cut off at parts of the story and then instantly start with a new part so you should try to add some bridges that lead from one part to another, so that the story is more fluently, thus making it easier and more enjoyable to read.

Well thats it for now :D

signed

Sinergy
jleonard chapter 1 . 3/16/2010
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