|Reviews for To Keep You|
| kittycatpony chapter 22 . 9/25/2013
aww that sucks, i have a lizard too and it's amazing how you can get so attached to the little things T-T
anyway back to the review...
this was a very well written story, but instead of putting a thing of popcorn i think it wold sound better if you put a bowl of popcorn or a bottle of lube instead of thing, i love how it can be so cute and sad at the same time, which is what i love about this story, i almost felt like i was a little side character in this. all in all a good story :)
| TheLastofUs chapter 12 . 8/3/2013
AJSKDFALSKF;DSK SHE'S TOTALLY HITTING ON YOU ALFRED HOW CAN YOU NOT MENTION MATTIE!? *Slaps*
| TheLastofUs chapter 3 . 8/2/2013
I give up I must read this.. XD NO SLEEEEEEEEP
| TheLastofUs chapter 2 . 8/2/2013
I'm really liking this story so far. Especially the comment about "Arthur mentioning sex casually?" XDDD Sadly I must go to bed so I must prolong the need to continue reading tonight... . I love your writing style 3
| ScytheMeister23 chapter 22 . 5/19/2013
This story was beyond amazing for me. I really love how kept the idea of a bad past real, along with keeping the characters actually in character (people don't usually think that Canada can get mad ). On a more personal note, I love how you used so many of the countries in your story, and especially you didn't use porn to keep the story going.
| Nokturna168 chapter 22 . 7/23/2012
I loved this story! It was amazing. And that last paragraph/three sentences were so sweet
| Guest chapter 12 . 7/18/2012
I love how jealous Mattie is getting! It's so cute And I love the awkwardness a t the end :)
| Nokturna168 chapter 8 . 7/15/2012
...What happened to Ivan? I can only imagine what he's been up to! ;)
| Nokturna168 chapter 7 . 7/15/2012
I'm really loving this party. This is so awesome! ;)
| Nokturna168 chapter 1 . 7/9/2012
This chapter is really good! This story has a lot of potential and I can't wait to read the rest of it. But before I go to chapter two, I would like to give you some advice: Try not to use the word "thing" in your writing. You didn't use it often, which is good, but you still used it. Try to use the objects actual name. For example, instead of "thing of popcorn" or "thing of lube" say"bowl of popcorn" or "tube of lube". I hope this was helpful to you :)
| Xiennaphine Silence chapter 22 . 6/10/2012
What was your lizards name?
| Xiennaphine Silence chapter 7 . 6/10/2012
dysfunctional is the best kind of functional :)
| Someone Who Knows chapter 22 . 4/3/2012
First and foremost, I loved this story.
I think you did a great portrayal of Bulimia. Just like Alfred, most people think it's when people throw up to get skinny. It's more deep than that. I found myself pitying Matthew from time to time, mostly feeling his pain. Although, I would've enjoyed it more if the reader would've been transformed into Matthew's mind. Eating disorders are so dangerous because they are also mental illnesses. Living inside Canada's mind would've given us a whole new aspect. I know, 'cause I've been developing a set of stories, in which one of them is about a girl with an eating disorder. And what makes it so thrilling, is to actually live inside her thoughts and feelings, feeling somehow trapped, like they do.
At first, I laughed at Ludwig's part in the story. It is such a good portrayal I laughed at the irony of it. But I think there was something missing. Wether Ludwig was a physiologist or just plainly the specialist, I think more sympathy would've been in order. When a person who has an eating disorder refuses to admit his or her problem, the doctor needs to be able to crack them open, even if they utterly refuse. I think that Ludwig attitude at the point which he states "you don't want to be here", and such was a little harsh. Effective but not what needed to be done.
Other than that, this was heartbreaking and touching. Especially since we also saw it around a relationship context. We see Matthew's struggles, but we also see how Alfred is forced to deal with it every day. It's not easy watching the love of your life waste away, and not being able to do anything about it. I enjoyed it so much, I wish it hand't ended. But great ending.
There should be an epilogue, or a continuation. :D
| Cappin Geraldine chapter 22 . 11/27/2011
First of all, it had a wonderful conclusion. It wrapped every situation up almost perfectly from Francis to Ludwig. There were a few grammar mistakes and spelling errors but I read them over because the flow of the story went by so well. The subject of bulimia is a rather sensitive one, as we all know, but even with it's difficulty of portrayal, I enjoyed the seriousness without a second thought. I literally go searching for such slice-of-life fanfiction whenever I have a craving to read something satisfying that'll leave at least one strong impression. You never find enough of these kinds of stories in the Hetalia fandom that often since most of it on this site is an accumulation of immature, fluffy crack pairings. Back to the piece, sometimes I'd have to re read some sections because I wouldn't understand the messages between the lines or if I had missed some forshadowing. I couldn't find myself to read the chapters in one complete session because of the tedious scrolling and re scrolling. All and all, it was beautiful to see the two be so in love and I couldn't help myself stop reading to reflect on my own relationship. Getting a little more personal here, since my ... girlfriend and I have I guess what most people would call, a distant semi-relationship. We have never met in person but we've known each other for two years now, confessing for each other just 8 months ago. She has seen me at my best and at my worst and, heck, has stuck with me through my first move and my bi-polar disorder. I'm kind of embarrassed to say so but we've fallen hopelessly in love. When I read through this story, about Matthieu and Alfred going through the communicational and emotional struggles, I made a comparison. You see, my girlfriend has bi-polar and post traumatic depression and I couldn't help feel hopeful. Hopeful that her and I could both dream of such a future like this together. I want to thank you for making this strong impression on myself and, hopefully, it will even slightly assist our struggles of the distance between us.
And since I'm already at it, the friendship between Francisnand Matthieu made myself compare my own childhood friendship to theirs and couldn't feel any more reassured about the fact they were so similar. My friend and I had known each other since the beginning and have stuck together since. After moving away recently, we're still together and still got the knack for comforting and helping each other when things get tough.
It was an amazing story and literally brought me to tears at the end of the last chapter. It was all so wonderful. I apologize for spamming your review section with meaningless personal life but I just wanted you to know how this story made such an impression on me. Five stars. Favorited. Amen.
| surprisedreader chapter 22 . 12/5/2010
this was a beautifully crafted story that I completely enjoyed from beginning to end! It was so realistic and you could tell the information you used was fact based. (Or your really good at B. ) Either way it was great and I loved it!