|Reviews for The Price|
| Purplehawke3 chapter 3 . 8/13/2012
This is a fabulous story. I love the characters and the interaction between all the characters.. I'm looking forward to reading the sequels.
| Kikilia14 chapter 3 . 6/7/2012
Totally loved this story. Great pace and solid characters. So glad I read it. :)
| ivo1617 chapter 3 . 12/17/2011
This is an interesting situation for future Xena and future Gabby to be in. They live together and they do not know what the other does for a living. Future Xena even has a secret office in the house. Being a singer is something that definitely fits Xena; she always has had a nice voice. Making Gabby into a hacker was an interesting choice. She's a writer so chances are she is not supposed to be good at math and stuff.
I found it interesting that the agents kept referring to the names of Greek gods when cursing. I never thought I would hear Xena (or someone with Xena's soul) use the term Ares' balls.
The big question after reading this is who gets the nickname of Hercules in the agency?
| Kenneth Black chapter 3 . 11/24/2011
*squeal!* XD It's so professional and just a perfect way to balance a story! XD Fabulous way to 'end' this, or is this the beginning? 3 Any way, you did a great job.
| Kenneth Black chapter 2 . 11/24/2011
XD Wow, you've got so many amazing links to the world of Xena and the world of celebrities, and it was hilarious to find out the names of who was who while contributing to the whole plot-line. Fast-paced and a well-oiled read. Awesome job! XD
| Angelsheart85 chapter 3 . 11/24/2011
this was WOW but purely WOW and it will be all by me cause U dear left me SPEECHLESS! :D SPEECHLESS!
| the mighty lu bu chapter 1 . 8/17/2010
This is part and parcel of an effort to improve the reviews I write, so enjoy.
At first I wasn’t so sure, but soon I figured out what the story was really about. It was difficult to tell at first that Alex wasn’t a man. You need to create something to make it more clear, such as Alex brushed her hair to the side as she looked at the blond woman. It causes confusion and that’s not good in a story.
However this is a very excellent story and an excellent one shot. It’s strongest part was the Lucas death in the middle east and the trouble that the parents had with Alex and Kasey’s lifestyle. I would have put a comment like “This is who I am” or something similar as it stands it makes Alex appear to almost separate herself from the heterosexual world, whereas I believe most Homosexuals that are not part of the anti straight movement (and I doubt Xena or Gabby ever would be) would say “This is who I am” as I reference to the fact that they are no different than anyone else.
Therefore with a comment “This is who I am” or something similer would imply that the world should not even be divided between Gay and Straight, but rather this “is one big world that I am apart of, and it makes no difference whether my partner is man or woman.” I’m not saying you should make this story political, gods no, but rather I just feel that Alex comes off as “I and Kasey are of a different world than you” and I don’t think that is what you intend. Sorry if I’ve over done that point.
I love the choices of names Alex and Kasey, both names are often found on both sexes, this really adds to the story in a simple way implying that Xena and Gabrielle could have been both born men, but they are born women. It seems to allow different perceptions as to what X & G could be instead of limiting them to the female form as some authors do. Xena has no need of limits.
The idea that Alex is a musical artist is a very nice touch. It shows once again other possibilities for the characters other than being an ass kicking warrior or a battling bard.
Your scene detail, such as the fireplace was burning with real wood was excellent as it helps us readers understand better the surrounding which these characters are in. Kasey’s reaction to the great Dane, accusing her of buying a horse instead of a dog. I swear that I heard Gabrielle’s voice in my head accusing Xena of that.
Overall, your story is excellent and well wrote, I see no grammar errors but if you read my work you’ll see that I’m definitely not and English teacher, lol. Excellent detail, extremely well polished. You should be proud of this one. I hope you enjoyed this far more detailed review. Your are the first to receive a review with my new method of over analyzing the story and then typing my response in document form before copying and pasting to the review box.
| ideasofmany chapter 3 . 6/29/2010
I thoroughly enjoyed this uber. The descriptions you used, from the environment to the action scenes are impressive. It made me wonder if you had some law-enforcement experience :). I liked the idea of P.L.U.T.O. and how you incorporated the code names. I will be reading more of your Xena work :D.
| Balboa chapter 3 . 3/18/2010
Loved it, Kasey's my favorite, just so nonchalent and all lol ;) Could you read mine, tell me what you think?