Reviews for Innocence
Richy1991 chapter 1 . 1/9/2012
good story
saiyan prince1 chapter 1 . 12/12/2010
well it was kinda fast paced but a good fic none the less. it might have been better to have made it a few chapters long to add to this a bit. not more story of after the engagement but the story of it all before. but then again thats just me. thanks again
Suffern187 chapter 1 . 7/21/2010
Thank you so much for allowing us to read this story.

This was so wonderful and very detailed...you stayed as close as you could. However like the person below me...this did feel a little rush. I don't believe that she would have given her first time to him the very first day of meeting him. You know without her being DRUNK lol xD

But please do make a new chapter don't let this be a oneshot
X2501 chapter 1 . 6/1/2010
eeer. it was good, felt way too rushed though. they meet, she decides to give him her virginity after 20 mins of knowing him.. not bad, I'm just saying, it was realy good, just the pace was too quick.
nightwing27 chapter 1 . 5/11/2010
good story it was rated M and NC-17 stories always are more fgun then the boring huggin or kissing and the short scenes of sex I hate the ban they have here for NC17 I'm glad their's web sites that allows it
Dudtheman chapter 1 . 4/7/2010
cool story )
Mike Kromer chapter 1 . 3/22/2010
Man this is good, wold love to see another chapter to this, keep up the good work
Joe chapter 1 . 3/16/2010
Okay, just met jumped into bed... Old as Haruka still a virgin... It's kind of lame. If you want them to have sex so bad, have them meet in a club, get drunk and you know the rest. You may want to rethink this.
WayDrifter chapter 1 . 3/16/2010
yay good work. Love the Keitaro/Tsuruko pairings so please contiune writhing them.
Chownz chapter 1 . 3/16/2010
If this is a one-shot, then well done. And excellent tale, not the usual bashing fic and very emotional to a point that it doesn't degrade itself. Great that you used one of three of my favorite pairings, wonder if there's going to be another chapter? Hm.

Ka kite ano

K
Love Hina Fanatic chapter 1 . 3/15/2010
excellent story. this done without being a bashing fic. A1 job.

5 *

Chris
SecondSeraphim chapter 1 . 3/15/2010
Great fic.
Major Mike Powell III chapter 1 . 3/15/2010
Well, well, soldier...

This...was...fckin' AW3SOME!

Tons of WAFF and smutt-y goodness.

And with a few LOL's thrown in.

My only regret: there was no Kei/Mutsumi. ToT I think Tsu-chan woulda been more than happy to share? LMAO

Still, outstanding piece of work, marine!

Semper-Fi! Carry on!
DanielRZ19 chapter 1 . 3/15/2010
nice, Tsuruko and Keitaro fics are my favorite, but I feel that this fic was cut dow too short, it's very good, but I strongly encourage you to make it longer and turn it into a chapters long fic, the concept is new new and I would love for you to explore it, maybe make it so Tsuruku stays to watch her sister, and things build up from there as a beaten Keitaro fights his sadness and inner deamons, with the help of Tsuruko of course, but nonetheless great fic thanks for the upload.
Nysk chapter 1 . 3/15/2010
Well written and enjoyable if a bit rushed in the relationship area.. but then I like long stories.
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