|Reviews for 5 years later|
| JediGaladriel chapter 1 . 3/3
It's good, but you really need to consider getting a beta reader to read over this. I see a bunch of punctuation & spelling errors. There are also a couple places (in the first paragraph) where it's hard to understand what you're trying to say. For example, in your first paragraph: "panic for what was happening with his felt Alyssas arms tighten around his, how could being sleepless give him so much happiness nowadays?". You really need to fix that part. I'm not flaming you or anything like that. I'm just trying to help.
| Adriana Swan chapter 1 . 7/26/2012