Reviews for It's Real This Time
x0clairedelunex0 chapter 12 . 4/2/2010
This is a really good storyline, and some of the things you said were really funny. Just a few pointers though: this whole story seems more like an outline than the real thing. I'm having troulbe figuring out when events are taking place and who's talking. You might want to revise it and make it a lot clearer. But I think the plot is really good, and it just needs the clarity to make it better!