Reviews for Sudden Surrender
Jaxxy chapter 1 . 12/15/2011
Her name is not Rachel, nor was it ever Rachel. Her name is Raven.
GreenRock chapter 1 . 10/19/2010
An enjoyable one-shot you have here.

The way you bring out Rae's vulnerabilities and her sorrow had a lot of emotional impact and how it was all patched up through Gar's kindness. By being her 'shoulder-to-cry-on', it shows how those two people are 'meant' (if you know what I mean). Even with the simplest of acts, i.e. Rae resting her head on Gar's shoulder was a touching moment which lends well to this one-shot.

Well Done.

Krystal McKenna chapter 1 . 4/13/2010
Ah, here we go! A well-written story that's an AU without being annoying and cliched and which also has a good grip on the characters. You didn't change the way they acted just because it was an AU, and the present tense stays steady throughout it. I liked the way you backed up Rachel/Raven's unfeeling ways in an AU where she's not in danger of destroying things by showing emotion. Well done.
GlacierBlueRose chapter 1 . 4/6/2010
I loved it. It was short but so full of emotions and very well written. Keep up the great writing style.
widowsforest chapter 1 . 4/4/2010
I really liked this. Its the kind of story that just makes you go "aww" and smile! Thank you!
Nightcrawler's Shadow chapter 1 . 3/24/2010
Simply beautiful is the only way to describe this.
Techno Skittles chapter 1 . 3/22/2010
A good story over all. I have one critique. At the end, you kept saying Rita and it was a little annoying and boring. Maybe you could use another name/term for Rita or combine the sentences?
Throwaway4985012 chapter 1 . 3/21/2010
It wasn't bad, but it wasn't the greatest thing I've read.


Strong intro

Well written



Terrible ending. With the way the ending is worded, her entire life is based off a relationship with Garfield. Very stable... not.

The telling of Rachel's story was a bit brief, expanding that scene a bit would be better. Maybe have her actually tell the story, instead of a summary.


A good, well written story. Some parts needed elongation and editing, but those are relatively small details.

Score I would give:

titanfan45 chapter 1 . 3/21/2010
Very Nice!
Wolvmbm chapter 1 . 3/20/2010
Very interesting story for a one shot. As it just took one peaceful moment for everything to be crashing down on Rachel. :(

However with Garfield by her side, her live is reborn anew. :D

This was a great idea for a one shot and I wish for you to keep up the good work upon great ideas like theses for future stories. :D
XdarkbirdX chapter 1 . 3/20/2010
aww, i love this! :) it's so cute 3