|Reviews for Not Yet|
| heylalaa chapter 1 . 5/22/2010
i really like this. just... i... erm, i don't know what to say. this is just so angsty, and-i love it. :)
| Blue Deity chapter 1 . 3/22/2010
Wow. Just. Wow! Another excellent job Starling, I'm quite truthfully blown away.
| ChihiroAyasato chapter 1 . 3/22/2010
I LOVED your opening sentence! I was expecting nummy angst all the way through but the way you incorporated humour into this very serious moment was great!
The TOASTER! LOVE THE REFERENCE TO FANDOM. XD XD
And I also liked the way you kept making Diego's thoughts coherant to the audience. The way he screamed at himself was like the way Dahlia screamed at Mia in State vs. Wright. 0_0
Good reference to 'Waiting for Godot' as well!
Favourite part of story Seeing Mia through Phoenix at the very end of fanfic. I thought about that aLOT whilst I was playing the game. And the part where Mia 'appeared' next to Phoenix to object with him was AWESOMELY AWESOME!
LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH! *adds to fav*
Hehe... I think I need to be more critical... but it's hard when you're in love with a fanfic so good... ;)
| Caramia Pen chapter 1 . 3/21/2010
This was very good! However, I think you made a bit of an error here:
"A lawyer doesn't cry until it's all rubbed the scars on his hand. He had crushed his mug in that hand, once. He still could remember how Mia's tears had tasted in his coffee. Salt in his coffee. Tasted terrible, it did."
Somehow the "A lawyer doesn't cry until it's all over" got cut out. You might want to fix that ;