|Reviews for The Marriage Contracts Redux|
| Spartacusj23 chapter 5 . 1/27
just all the laughs
| kidstar666 chapter 5 . 12/29/2015
So I was browsing around and another author said your story gave him inspiration and decided to check it out. I have to say that while I have read way too many stories on this site, your's has to be in the top five of the ones I have read. I don't review much if at all but I felt the need to let you know what a great story this was. So thank you for it.
| ASKreader chapter 5 . 12/28/2015
I never read the first version of this story, so I can't compare. This rewrite is clever with intelligent characterization, the time leaps are managed well, and the humor is great fun. Thanks so much!
| Guest chapter 5 . 12/14/2015
Love the story. I just wish you wouldn't have made it seem like all foreigners were as bad as that paedophile.
Notable foreigners (and a little tangent):
Viktor was 2-3 years older than Hermione, but he took her to a chaperoned school dance and maybe kissed. It's not nearly as bad as some of the stories out there that get great reviews when Snape is having BDSM sex with an underage Hermione. People make an 18 year old Viktor bad for going to the dance with a 15 year old Hermione...yet a 35 year old Snape f-ing Hermione's brains out while he has her in bondage is OK...I don't understand that logic.
Fleur is another foreigner that gets the short end of the stick. Being called phlem by the blood bigoted Weasley's was degrading and uncalled for.
Nicolas and Perenelle Flamel were from France and went to Beauxbatons.
Gregorovitch was highly regarded East European wand-maker.
Parvati and Padma Patil are of Indian descent. However, there is no mention of if they were born in the UK or India.
Cho Chang is of Asian descent. Again, no mention of where she was born.
See those are just a few examples of why you shouldn't have news articles about all foreign people being evil child rapist (just the a**h**e who did bad things to Daphne was).
Next time pair a main character with a foreigner like HP/FD, HG/VK, and NL/Padma Patil (using her initials would have caused confusion, I can think of 3 girls with the initials PP just in the same year as Harry's)
My husband was a legal immigrant from Bulgaria, now he's a full tax-paying citizen. He's 5 years older than I am and we met when I was 16 (FYI, no sex didnt happen until marriage 5 years after we met). I'm tired of people reading in fanfiction's about the evil foreigners and then thinking it applies to them all. My daughters ex-friend called my husband a paedophile because of Viktor bashers. So I'm trying to stop the hate. Yes, I said ex-friend. People tend to stop friendships when people lable their father in a most degrading and 100% untrue way.
So don't extrapolate from one data source. Not all foreigners are bad. Just like not all blondes are idiots, red heads actually do have souls, people of African descent are not all gang members on welfare, and not all Muslims are ISIS members.
I really did like the story, I just wish more fanfiction's were foreigner friendly. Best of luck to you.
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| s-david-m chapter 5 . 11/30/2015
Great story. A nice balance of humour and drama. Harry/Neville partnership fics are great, and you have a good one here.
| Guest chapter 2 . 10/27/2015
First not sure why you think hermonie would do Better the. Ron. He did well in school and has better people skill. But you lied and sAid less weasly beshing. Then had Ron who been in love with hermonie for years risk his life for her. Is a jerk
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/27/2015
Ron and hermonie don't fight nearly as much as you said and for the wesaly how many time did they risk there life for him. But for some reason they only did it for the money
| BillBrink chapter 5 . 10/27/2015
I reviewed this several years ago the first time I read this. Seeing that I enjoyed the story just as much the second time, I thought I would send you another "well done and thank you".
| Temporal Knight chapter 5 . 10/7/2015
Final thoughts: This story was incredibly fun. I got a huge kick out of the karmic punishment for Voldemort. I have to say that was the first time I've seen something quite so...inventive and appropriate for him!
It's cute that you ended with giving Tracey Charlie. I can see that working.
I'm relatively satisfied with how Hermione ended up. I do think she should've hit Ron though when he tried to get back together like there hadn't been anything wrong.
Tonks as the head of the department was hilarious!
I seriously feel bad for Remus. That was just mean.
My only complaint in this chapter was that I had to check several of the time jump dates a few times to make sure I was getting the narrative in order. I am pleasantly surprised that I was right about Harry actually giving mostly the truth during the wedding speech.
Overall, this story was a hell of a lot of fun and I am glad to have stumbled across it. Well done!
| Temporal Knight chapter 4 . 10/7/2015
I really liked the way you used small flashback sections to tell what happened in the backstory. That was a nice touch and it gave a lot more context to just what happened with the falling outs. I do feel like Remus got a bit worse off than he deserved but I never really liked him with Tonks so I'm probably not quite as put out as I would be. Tonks on the other hand was hilarious every time she popped on screen. Especially the small part last chapter about her apartment being clean, her porn being gone and her oven actually being able to be used to make food!
I love Neville's version of his "hyphenated name" and his utter casualness the entire time. Freaking perfect!
And I fully stand by my original opinion of Daphne's family. I'm just going to go and wash my mind out with some nice fluff story after the last chapter. Good riddance to Cyrus and the Romanian. Too bad they didn't get the butler too.
Harry lying his ass off and covering it with some help from the goblins was hilarious by the way. The icing on the cake was Moody's reaction to it.
| Temporal Knight chapter 2 . 10/6/2015
I love the name of their club. Seriously, it's pretty much perfect. And funny as hell.
The date was awesome. I wish I was half that good at coming up with smart ideas for dates. It's cute how Tracey and Hermione are protective of their respective friends though both Tracey and Neville had good points about Hermione's lack of attention prior. Hannah's rundown of who was in the running was downright hilarious by the way!
I honestly don't get why McGonagall was so angry with Harry. Mildly annoyed, sure but seething I don't see.
Sooooo...Ron...yeeeeaaaaahhhh...I can't believe I'm saying this but I would've preferred the love potion. I mean how do you not punch that asshole in the face and knock out several teeth? Seriously how? Comforting Hermione right away is one thing but...I had a friend in that same situation and the only that that prevented me from beating him bloody was the fact he was on another landmass. Using a random girl for FBs is bad enough but using one of your best friends? I just...if this is the toned down version I'm glad I missed the worse one because I would've had to go back and read a fluff fic before continuing just to get my blood pressure under control.
| Temporal Knight chapter 1 . 10/6/2015
I hope you mention exactly what Dumbledore/Weasleys did. I admit it is funny and gives depth having the allusions without the full story but it also gets a little frustrating at times. On the flip side, not knowing exactly how they defeated Voldemort yet having hilarious and outlandishly untrue accounts of it (that follow a mix of canon and other fanfic plots) is side-splittingly funny for some odd reason. Hell the entire backbone of this story is entirely hilarious!
I always find it funny how no matter how much people seem to dislike the Weasleys in general, no one ever has a bad thing to show for the twins. Fred and George are pretty much universally loved no matter what or where you read.
I love Tonks.
Aww, Millicent was kind of sweet! Go figure.
I like the budding romance with Daphne very much as well as her development. I also like Harry's reasons for pursuing a relationship with her. And her family is disgusting. Utterly abhorrent people approaching Umbridge level.
Now Hermione on the other hand I'm a little worried about. I know from recommendations that your first version of this story had major Weasley bashing and while that is definitely not nearly so present in this version I do find that that sort of thing tends to go part and parcel with love potions. While I have nothing against Hermione actually acting like a hormonal teenager for once, it does set off warning flags.