Reviews for Reversal
sirensbane chapter 3 . 11/8/2015
Poor Neal! Just one thing that I noticed: you said that his hands were handcuffed behind his back, and then were lifted over his head. Since the joints don't work that way, either his arms would tear out of their sockets, or he would be forced to bend almost double. From your descriptions, neither of those two things seem to happen.
BlueDiamondStar chapter 11 . 2/22/2013
LOL this ending made me laugh.
Good story. Interesting.
5ngela chapter 11 . 2/20/2013
I really love this story. I love how you make Neal hurt Peter although I hope you make Neal hurt Peter more (maybe shot him or drugged him or whatever) to make it more dramatic. I love the idea Peter thrown up, it convey the feelings of Peter hurtings. Please make another one like this.
pechika chapter 1 . 2/28/2011
Lovely story
Sparky Dorian chapter 11 . 4/16/2010
That was good! Aw... The moment when they made up was sweet. I literally shouted my computer screen several times, and I accidentally whacked my brother... Oops. Well. The point being that it really sucked me it. Great job!
Sparky Dorian chapter 5 . 4/16/2010
Oh, no... Is this Mozzie an impostor? I'm concerned!
Sparky Dorian chapter 3 . 4/16/2010
Ah! No! This is the worst kind of dramatic irony! Poor Neal! *deep calming breaths...* That's so awful that he thinks it's Peter!
peppe1951 chapter 11 . 3/26/2010
Good chapter but it leaves to many questions who was after them and why did they want Neal dead? Why was a double of Peter being used against Neal...go to be more...
j3nnee chapter 11 . 3/25/2010
Thanks for the comments.

I didn't mean to rush it. Got a little frustrated with my boss nagging me about typing at work. :P Didn't want to drag the story out too much either but I will work on an epilogue. I did have more to write.
Wondo chapter 11 . 3/25/2010
Enjoyed Reversal. Very addicting. Just felt it was rushed after Chapter 9. I don't understand how Peter would have recovered so quickly after his injury. Wanted another chapter of Peter/Neal confronting each other before the night intruder stepped in. Would have rather Neal been the rescuer during the fire as Peter had been so weak. Thanks for the story.
FotoDi chapter 11 . 3/25/2010
No way... Not the end.

Who was trying to kill them?

Why the Doppelganger - strategy? Goal?

Why have lame decoys staking out Peter's house?

If both Neal & Peter were shot, wouldn't they have to go to the Hospital?

Why was Neal fooled by the impersonator (while being tortured) but not Jones (in the elevator)?

Mozzie has lost all his possessions & home - in fire. Where will he live?

You conclude that Neal now wants his GPS tracker because...

Neal feels safer if Peter can find him any time;

Neal feels ashamed for beating up Peter and will wear GPS in penance;

Neal wants to prove that he trusts Peter to care for him & tracker is demonstration

Contrarily, Peter now does not necessarily want Neal to wear he tracker because...

Neal won't likely run if no Kate to lure him away;

Not requiring tracker proves to Neal (& Hughes) that Peter trusts Neal to honor his obligations;

and most importantly because Peter does not trust that that OPR (or some other corrupt upper-echelon Fed) will not use Neal's exact GPS info against him;

maybe you could explore this plot reversal more deeply.
Ursula4x chapter 11 . 3/25/2010
This went the distance from almost horror to sweet relief. Thanks for writing.
Iuliana chapter 11 . 3/25/2010
I sure hope it's not the End but if it is thank u for the ride. I have to ask what's with Mozzie twitching his nose? u said that like 100 times and it was the only annoying thing. He doesn't do that and even if I missed it, I doubt he does it that often. It was a bit unrealistic how Elizabeth easily treated 2 gun wounds by herself. The ending was a bit rushed but over all it was a pleasure reading it. Thank u for taking the time to write it.
shirik chapter 10 . 3/24/2010
tnx for updating!
Apathetic Mortal chapter 10 . 3/24/2010
This is really getting exciting! I love how all of it is believable and not taken too far out of context like some stories I've read! Can't wait for chapter 11! Also, very well written, awesome story!
22 | Page 1 2 Next »