|Reviews for Ravenous|
| Spitfire303 chapter 15 . 4/1/2015
| curiositycollection chapter 15 . 4/18/2013
Ha, ha! Nice resolution to Pete's problem with "bad luck." Great idea for a subplot!
I appreciated that you incorporated so much action and suspense into this case-file. This is an excellent story. Very well done!
| curiositycollection chapter 12 . 4/18/2013
"Ah Arthur, how lovely to see you again!"
With his Warehouse background, he was the "best" villain. I wish the show had kept him as Artie's ongoing nemesis.
Whoa, poor Artie!
Great work, very suspenseful!
| curiositycollection chapter 9 . 4/18/2013
MAJOR plot twist!
This is an excellent story :)
This would make a great episode for the show, too!
(Sadly, the show probably wouldn't have the budget to shoot your action-packed script.)
| curiositycollection chapter 8 . 4/18/2013
"Nope, wrong dragon. Gotta go. Bye!"
Even more beasts & creatures terrorize the town, and still no sign of an artifact?
| curiositycollection chapter 7 . 4/18/2013
"Midnight found both agents peering around the corner of an ancient building, ears straining for the sounds of animal activity."
- Artie's unexpected arrival surprises Myka & Pete (and the readers)! Well done :)
| curiositycollection chapter 6 . 4/18/2013
They need to shoot the wild beast, and the Tesla doesn't work! Bad timing ... for Pete.
| LadyNRA chapter 1 . 4/18/2013
Curiositycollection sent me a PM to tell me that what they wrote in the review didn't come out the way they intended it to. Asked me to delete it, but since I couldn't delete it, I'm simply putting what the reviewer said they intended to say:
Hi - I left a review for ch. 1.
Unfortunately, I am unfamiliar with all the ways that the Fanfiction site
automatically edits things.
My review made more sense when I wrote, "Vivid description (plus) ravenous
beast terrorizing the townfolk (equals) great opening scene!"
Please feel free to delete the problematic comment :)
So THANKS to curiositycollection for your chapter reviews. I appreciated your taking the time to do this.
| curiositycollection chapter 5 . 4/17/2013
"Jumped out at me, beat the crap out of me, and then laughed…loudly. Oh wait, I lied, that was Myka laughing at me. My bad."
- LOL! Great lines, sounds just like Pete.
And the terrible accidents only happen to Pete. Hmmm ...
| curiositycollection chapter 2 . 4/17/2013
"And have I ever sent you on an assignment that didn't contain the words 'weird occurrences' and 'probable artifact involvement' in the same sentence?"
- Great line :)
| curiositycollection chapter 1 . 4/17/2013
Vivid description ravenous beast terrorizing the townfolk great opening scene!
| LadyNRA chapter 10 . 10/31/2012
Fugacity: You are absolutely right about Mr. Rogers! I put up the chapter based on some internet stuff I found during researching. But about a month after uploading I went on snopes to double check and discovered that it was an 'urban legend'. So, at that point, I took a few minutes to rewrite the paragraphs (about 3 sentences worth) to reveal that Artie was pulling Pete's leg. Unfortunately, after I rewrote the scene in my own files I forgot to upload it. Worse, my laptop hard drive crashed last month. Guess I'll have to recreate it and update soon. :-)
So to anybody who reads the reviews, I was already aware of this mistake and just kept forgetting to upload the revision. If it's still uncorrected you'll know my ADD is getting the best of me.
| Fugacity chapter 10 . 10/31/2012
I realize that urban folklore becomes reality in the Warehouse 13 universe, but the real Fred Rogers had no tattoos. Check out for more info if you are interested. Of course Snopes is also an excellent source of ideas for future stories too...
Been enjoying the story so far. Creative. Somewhat novel. Keep it up.
| LadyNRA chapter 5 . 10/15/2012
Dude, really? Here's the line: "The other two were bitten, clawed or assaulted by smaller predatory animals or the ram." I didn't say, 'bitten, clawed AND assaulted', I said, "or assaulted." The ram didn't bite anyone. It 'assaulted' someone.
First, this is a fantasy story and I could have given that ram wings and sharks teeth and gotten away with it simply by nature of the artifact used and literary license. If you watch the show you should know that artifacts do some crazy things to people. Second, most creatures have a fight or flight response and given the nature of the artifact in this, if I want his passing mention and behavior in this story to be one of aggression, that's my perogative.
All I can say to your comment is ... Good grief!
| Jake Crepeau chapter 5 . 10/13/2012
Well, there is one definite bit of weirdness going on here...that ram! Sheep don't eat meat; they're strictly grazers. And what's more, they don't bite...in fact, they CAN'T bite; they have no top teeth, except for molars 'way in the back of their mouths. The only thing sheep normally do in the presence of strange humans is to run away, not attack, even rams, and especially wild ones.