Reviews for Forsaken
Goneforgoodintothewoods chapter 14 . 12/26/2011
Mother of Arceus - That was amazing 3 Oh dear lord I missed Mew soooo much, I really enjoyed how you fit the human/angle girl Amber in there, I hope I get to see her in the following chapters. I loved the part with the mirror, that was very interesting, it seemed to really bring the story to life. Great job!
Goneforgoodintothewoods chapter 13 . 12/26/2011
This wonderful, very well written and descriptive. I don't know if I should be happy or upset that the others might find/be "Mew" and Mewtwo again soon..
Goneforgoodintothewoods chapter 11 . 12/26/2011
"Down there... you know." She turned to Mew's direction in sympathy. "Honey, did they take your baby? Do you remember?" - I really really really loved this chapter. Your writing skills are simply amazing! You've got great detail when it comes to discribbing what people look like, and what emotions there experiencing. Poor Mew though.. She really had what could of been a great relation ship with that child, I would of liked to see a description of what the child looked like..Very nice!
Goneforgoodintothewoods chapter 10 . 12/26/2011
So was Mew gone, I mean no longer herself in the end?
Goneforgoodintothewoods chapter 6 . 12/25/2011
Woahhhhhhhhhh - Amazing job! I enjoyed that chapter a lot 3 The end was very nice -snicker-
Goneforgoodintothewoods chapter 5 . 12/25/2011
I'm just a tad confused...At the end, when Arceus is talking, did he mean that after everyone has begun living again - will they just die? Like no returning to their forming immortal selves?
denmawarlight chapter 19 . 12/7/2011
so I have read this story all the way up to now and i will be favoriting it after you complete it. when by any chance will the next chapter be done?
Joe chapter 19 . 11/30/2011
Oh, and the zombies getting the concrete shoe treatment is more effective if you've been reading it. Freezing them, tying them down, then pouring cement on them would be wicked cool but not in line with the story's style, probably. God moding and all. (Deus Ex Machina to older readers aka 'wave the hand solution')

I'd _do_ wonder how the heck a zombie no matter how strong could get out of that jam. Especially if you teleported them into an ocean trench or the moon. They could revive and struggle all they want and it would take practically forever to get to you again. There's just no traction in the trench and walking on the moon won't ever get you back to Earth. No, moon jumping doesn't work that way either, heh!
Joe chapter 19 . 11/30/2011
Wow that was a long read. 19 chapters and there's still at least 1 left! The big bad fight scene and epilogue are all that's left? :P The story was like a Stephen King novel - kind of downer at parts but well worth reading every chapter and especially the (upcoming) ending. The story stands alone which is interesting - most authors try to invent a reusable 'universe' that leads to new story ideas based on existing setups. It's convenient to not have to explain everything from scratch but self-contained stories are good, too.

Thanks for the story, Joe
theepitomeofrandom chapter 14 . 11/12/2011
Of course, Mewtwo is the most powerful...which is why legion tried him first, but failed, because he also has the strongest willpower (being a legendary psycic type...(which is essentially mind element...)), so they went with Mew...after breaking her...(probably figured out that legendary psycics were kinda hard to overthrow the willpower of normally...)...but his weakness (causing him to not fight back, which is the only way a mew could ever beat mewtwo...)i guess...of course, if Mews willpower could be restored, she could kick out what if they DID pull her through the mirror...thing...would her soul be simultaneously inside her body and outside of it?...would she become some kind of...scroedinger's cat? (interestingly she is a cat)...simultaneously living and dead? now, would this tear her soul in half, or simply have it coexisting in multiple locations?...and what if she then possessed the already possessed body?...would the pieces fuse, possibly kicking out the one who was already possessing it in the process?...could one trap a demon by surrounding it with a fully enclosed box made of bibles?...(though as Entei said, they probably all burned, sank in the ocean, or were otherwise destroyed by the meteor shower of world ending...)...why doesn't mewtwo just destroy the crystal?...or imprison the demon inside a box made of scroidinger bibles?...(mew could probably find some on the other side and throw them through...) (Which mewtwo could then trap her possessed body inside of, which wouldn't harm he should have no reservations of this, especially since it would possibly keep legion from further desecrating the body...)
theepitomeofrandom chapter 13 . 11/10/2011 it seems spirits CAN come and go from the afterlife at will...

Well, now Mewtwo has accepted that they aren't Mew, all he has to do is bring himself to destroy the body...

If Giratina could recreate the distortion realm, and chuck Legion in there, and destroy it again while they are inside...that SHOULD obliterate them...assuming Mew is completely, they should have tried BURNING the zombies...they cant put themselves together if the parts are gone...
theepitomeofrandom chapter 12 . 11/9/2011
Wow, all that for a body? thats a pretty pathetic evil ambishion, i must say legion...

And wait, the world was full of corrupt beings who were supposed to be there, and arceus meteored it till they were all dead, what does legion think he is going to do when its full of EVEN MORE CORRUPT demons, who ARENT supposed to be there? thinking death star but...they probably didnt think this through very well...

Interestingly, mewtwo probably COULD move a mountain...and legion REALLY needs to stop trying to make him snap...the entire area might implode into nothing...(hm, so lesser demons are holding him to the, i thought they didn't have bodies...)

And when did Arceus say to recreate ALL those species...he sorta just came down out of the sky and told them to multiply (then made them pass out)...
theepitomeofrandom chapter 9 . 11/7/2011
Perhaps he should use his rediculously strong psychic powers to attempt an exorcism?
theepitomeofrandom chapter 6 . 11/7/2011
It occurs to me...when did Mewtwo agree to that thing?...he does't exactly have any kind of guardian job...and if Mews have the dna for every pokemon, but Mewtwo has the dna for Mews...AND humans, he would be even more versatile...and couldn't they just send Celebi back to them right before they stopped doing their respective jobs, and tell them to get in line?...heck, even if they forget again, cycle repeats, send Celebi back to tell them to get it together, they keep at it for a thousand years or so, send him back again once they forget and screw up...(time travel abuse is EXTREMELY good for stopping mistakes, especially when it doesn't create a paradox...)
CrossroadxOFxVesper chapter 19 . 11/7/2011
Hooray! You updated! Forgive me for how long it took me to get to this, but I've been exceedingly busy as of late.

Heh, Mew amused me with how forward she was. It was quite unexpected, to say the least. Mewtwo was standoffish for a while too... Good for them; it's about time they expressed their intimacy, considering they may have little time left. Hopefully there won't be little Mews running around in a few months though.

Cresselia's reaction also surprised me. I expected her to rush in and kill the mood. Latias is so clued out, lol.

I didn't expect the Regis to attack the group. The conflict between the groups was good though; it demonstrated the problems between them.

Gotta take off now, I'll be more thorough if I PM you.


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