|Reviews for No Tendo|
| Guest chapter 40 . 8/2
Fubared indeed and very well done at that I am looking forward to your next update.
| Tsamoka chapter 40 . 7/13
Please don't give up on this. I've been a huge fan of this story for a long time.
| Tsamoka chapter 3 . 7/13
Did I read that right? Specialist Asimov? As in Isaac Asimov, the writer? LOL! I can totally see him working for the SGC!
| moon so bright chapter 24 . 3/3
OMG, that was Suanko! Is she going to be in this plot more, too?
| moon so bright chapter 15 . 3/3
I like sane!Jedite and Nephrite.
| gearworks chapter 5 . 2/9
naming convention is fun to read
you can almost 'see' the characters
| Fast Frank chapter 22 . 1/22
I made this comment on Anime Addventure, but I'll say it again: F-14 is NAVY, and has significantly different characteristics from the F-18 (also NAVY) she trained in.
| WTF chapter 8 . 1/10
Interesting story, but your writing style leaves a lot to be desired. While grammar and punctuation is pretty spot on most of the time, the constant scenes shifts from one character to another without an real plot progression gets annoying. You even have a habit of writing scenes into your chapters that have nothing to do with the story, except for making your chapters longer. Once or twice every chapter is enough, you though, you do it every other paragraph.
And it isn't unique to this story, you did it in Spiral Dragon and Phoenix fragments. I stopped reading those two after getting more and more irritated about having to shift through a page load of junk just to understand where you were headed with the plot. In omakes, one-shots and short stories, these scenes provide a teaser about what might happen should the story continue, for full length stories, they just throw off the reader leading to more readers not bothering to finish reading your stories. It gets irritating.
| fellow chapter 15 . 11/26/2014
| Twiggy-Hoyden chapter 40 . 8/21/2014
Nice doorstopper of a fic. A little disjointed at times, maybe too many refernces thrown in. But a fun read.
| Difdi chapter 34 . 8/3/2014
People in power tend to view their aides as always working for their employer's interests. The aides sooner or later tend to see themselves as gatekeepers and then as managers of their employer.
By controlling the information the employer receives, they can control the employer. As Kinsey seems to be learning...
| Difdi chapter 11 . 8/1/2014
You have a technical error in this chapter.
The maximum depth of most SCUBA gear is around 150 meters. The world record dive with SCUBA gear is just over 300 meters - and that required specially built gear, a really exotic gas blend, one of the best divers in the world and the guy was only able to stay down for a couple minutes.
You have several divers engaging in extended operations over 400 meters down. Perhaps you meant feet, not meters? If not, you should probably have them using something other than a SCUBA rig.
| Difdi chapter 9 . 8/1/2014
You have an error in this chapter.
Clarke's First Law states "When a distinguished but elderly scientist states that something is possible, he is almost certainly right. When he states that something is impossible, he is very probably wrong."
It's Clarke's THIRD Law that comments on advanced technology and magic.
| Difdi chapter 6 . 8/1/2014
You seem to have a typo. One soldier in this chapter refers to his "M-90" as being small.
The only weapon in US military service (that I can find information on) called an M-90 is a large, .50 caliber sniper rifle. It's not something that anyone would call small.
The only small gun with a -90 designation in use by the SGC is a P-90, which defies easy classification - it's technically a very small battle rifle that fires sub-machine gun sized ammunition.
| Ikurus chapter 40 . 7/29/2014
Really cool story, though there were many references from series I hadn't seen or read that led to me spending a lot of time wandering around wikipedia. Not that that's a bad thing.
Thank you for writing and sharing this.