|Reviews for Revelations: A Cynic's View of Pokemon|
| sesshyluhvr chapter 10 . 6/7/2020
I'm now resigned to her, I neither like nor dislike Nozomi now... Progressive improvement!
| sesshyluhvr chapter 7 . 6/7/2020
Soooo, will she stay gone though?
Does he have 6 Pokémon? Or more- 10 years is a lot of travelling with only that 6, not including deaths and/or maimings.
| sesshyluhvr chapter 5 . 6/7/2020
Yeah, that dislike seems Here To Stay! Wooohoo!
| sesshyluhvr chapter 4 . 6/7/2020
Uhm wow, she's obnoxious and self-righteous. I try not to have instant dislike towards characters unless they're horrendous killing/raping/stalking etc pieces of shit, but I'll make an exception for Nozomi. I just really hate people forcing themselves unto someone like, hello can you just ask? And take no if that's the answer?
Yes, it looks like Karuta doesn't mind, but its the IDEA, yk?
| sesshyluhvr chapter 1 . 6/7/2020
Talk about misleading beginnings, huh?
I was expecting a total beat down which will affect her understanding of strength so much, years later she'll credit that one trainer for her resultant trauma or stardom... Left field straight from the start.
This is how we know its not a canon-like pokemon story, (even if the plot could be a whole different animal in later chapters)bravo!
| Mr.N0Name chapter 22 . 9/27/2017
*Beginning of the story
"This series is more realistic than the tv show"
Proceeds to insert characters that knocks out an ursaring with one punch and can easily outwrestle a huge Typhlosion.
| twentythirteen chapter 1 . 10/20/2015
First of all, Karuta and Amos are both overpowered and unrealistic charcters, and both of them should have died multiple times already if this story made any sense whatsoever. Nozomi is also a terrible character, and she is weak as hell until she kills the villain, which, by the way, was a boring way for the conflict to be resolved. Sakiyama wasn't a very good character either, and his motivations were weak and he just seemed like a pointless character overall.
The story also didn't feel like a Pokemon fic at times, especially when Amos and Karuta physically fought each other instead of using their pokemon, which would have made a lot more sense. I also thought the concept of the Underground was terrible, as it doesn't make sense that all these criminals and shady characters would agree to only use one pokemon and to not bring guns.
Finally, the ending was both good and bad. While I was surprised by the killing of Dokuga, I thought Karuta's motivations for doing so were not very good. Karuta has been a killer and cold-hearted character for the whole story, and now he suddenly regrets everything evil he has done? Also, there are too many loose ends not tied up. What happens to Nozomi and Karuta's pokemon? Shouldn't his pokemon be looking for him instead of hanging out with Nozomi? Karuta is heavily implied to be Nozomi's childhood friend, so what happens with that? How did Nozomi not recognize him? Why didn't Karuta want Nozomi to recognize him? What happened to Amos?
There were also some pretty glaring grammatical and spelling errors.
Overall, this story wasn't bad but it wasn't good either. Parts of it were boring and clichéd, but there were a few moments which were interesting, most notably the first and last chapters.
| esp.dav chapter 12 . 10/1/2015
I died at "It's best that you don't know hon'."
| vincent1875 chapter 1 . 5/5/2014
How is this realistic? A girl just happening to run into a cold blooded murderer for her first battle isn't realistic at all.
| Manser77 chapter 11 . 4/15/2014
I miss your writing
| Y.Rako chapter 3 . 2/21/2013
Karuta is a Merry Sue psychotic sadistic hypo critic sociopath.
From the behavior of the crowd he seems to be an exception and not the norm in this universe. Is this crack? This is what I felt and tried to take it seriously:
Lets mix two scenes, this is mostly fun for me (I'm not a writer):
Silence filled the street, the crowed was stunned mute. Pokemon death was a subject that was usually shoved to the back general populace's mind. Especially trained pokemon used in battles, unusual as that may seem, by and large were left with none deliberating injuries.
To see a beginner trainer's, admittedly pathetic, starter get gobbled up so callously by the veteran trainer's serpent was so shocking that quite a few jaws dropped at the gruesome sight. At the same time some of the few other veteran trainers that stood among the crowd straightened and started to take note of the situation.
When the black clad trainer smiled and the distraught beginner began running towards him intent on inflicting retribution and many in the crowd silently cheered feeling that the man deserved a good slap\punch to the face, a few cautiously reached for their pokeballs.
When the Arbok sprang forward and the trainer made no motion to stop it, one other had the reflexes and intuition necessary to prevent tragedy.
A moment before the large snake reached its next intended meal the jaw of a much larger creature closed around its neck holding it fast.
"Put it down!", the Nidoqueen, a pokemon with jaw strength capable of delivering more than 2 thousand kilograms of pressure, snapped its mouth shut, severing the Arbok's head.
"Put your damn hands in the air, don't you dare reach for those pokeballs!"
An officer Jenny had a handgun aimed the black clad trainer.
Yeah, sigh and rub the bridge of your nose now, you pompous drama queen.
| MockerDelight chapter 23 . 8/22/2012
I loved it and the darker view of the world of pokemon. I'm also curious as to what happened to the ditrean mixture that Webber put into Nozomi if I didn't somehow miss an important part and if Karuta is going to see Nozomi again.
| Dumb chapter 5 . 11/10/2011
probably wrong but im guessing ash ketchum XD
| plotholedetector chapter 20 . 11/1/2011
On the subject of Amos being left behind-
Karuta had a giant arbok on hand. It could have easily transported all three of them out of reach of the muk.
If dokuga is too big for the tunnel then Amos' typhlosion could have carried him out.
Also, Karuta should not get away with all he has done. The crimes are far too great to ignore them in favor of a happy ending.
Murder. Is. Unforgivable.
| Manser77 chapter 1 . 2/9/2011
I'll give you a cookie if you a sequel or another story like this