|Reviews for Duel Academy Really Sucks Ouch|
| Eriol Clowphengire chapter 1 . 11/29/2011
This is outrageously...
BAD: You could have clearly set-up the mood and the stage of your story, but you failed to do so, obviously for having an insane wall of text.
We cannot see the dialogues clearly. Also, you could have described your characters better, by the current state of your working, it is crude. Rewrite this, and I'm sure people will come back for your improvement.
| Kaiser dude chapter 1 . 6/1/2010
I tried reading this and can't keep focused on individual lines. Feels like I read line 2 and accidentally read over to line 4.
Create multiple paragraphs instead of a wall of text. Once you do that, the story WILL be read-able and easier on the readers' eyes.
| Usagisama68 chapter 1 . 4/24/2010
...! I like the idea and the chapter, but you can hardly read it. I kelp loseing my place and it was real annoying. Next chappie is might be better if you space it into pargraphs. Over all good chapter, its just the presentation ;)