|Reviews for The Wedding Party|
| PuzzlePerfect9 chapter 33 . 7/4
i really liked this story. i loved the character development and the relationships between everyone. sad its done.
| ImYours1901 chapter 33 . 6/2
a wonderful journey, thank you for sharing this!
| An Avid Reader chapter 33 . 5/30
Wow, I'm always in awe of authors who have the determination and care to finish their stories, which is always a huge accomplishment in and of itself! This story was just what I was looking for - a warm, fuzzy rom-com like romance story. I thoroughly enjoyed the personal growth that Bella achieved, and your writing style is quite seamless. I just have a few comments on the story in general, but they don't detract from my general liking of this story.
a) The beginning of the first chapter irked me because Bella's description is too cliched and too forthright. By describing her as a girl who is beautiful but doesn't know it is done just much too often and definitely made my eyes roll.
b) The story was very predictable and could have been shorter. The predictability probably was intentional as this is more of a story of personality & growth rather than plot. While the chapters dragged on a bit, that's probably just the story's nature as it's published serially, and we're here to enjoy the ride.
c) While Alice and Bella shout the "we're bold, beautiful, etc.", it's a bit of forced feminism. Bella's emotional weakness towards the end shows her devotion to Edward, but directly contradicts the seemingly feminist message Bella's personal growth has been attempting to portray. She gives up Aro's offer but she collapses crying into Edwards arms immediately afterwards. Because of how the ending played out, the feminism portrayed in the novel is a bit fake, as you're shouting feminist ideals but not following through with them. That is inherently showcased by Edward's magical position of a male partner - he's handsome, a doctor, and is loaded. Which all of course plays into the male character saving the damsel in distress Bella who is emotionally wounded and poor. But of course, that's more Stephanie Meyer's fault for creating such a dynamic originally.
d) Jay's presence is meant to be dominating over Bella's past, but his darkness is not fully explored in the beginning few chapters, in my opinion. While it is referenced that Bella becomes a shell of who she was, I feel that further detail could have been shed to how Jay's presence did so. Exactly how did it take over Bella's life? How schizophrenic did he actually get on a day to day basis?
e) The scene with Trinh rubbed the wrong way. By calling Edward "Mr. Edward", the portrayal of Trinh (and as the only representative Asian character) is inferior to the white male, Edward. Additionally, Trinh's daughter, who grew up in America, speaks in broken English. Realistically, 2nd generation children speak English fluently, and that further exoticizes the Asian characters in the novel and can be viewed as a racial microaggression.
I really hope you read this and know that I really did enjoy your novel, and I hope you take my comments into consideration for any future writing!
| aunree3 chapter 17 . 2/25
its a little concerning that they all thinks its fine that bella left a mentally ill jay back in seattle. dude has nobody and he desperately needs someone.
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/8
Such a wonderfully written story. Love how complex the characters are. I stayed up until 2am finishing it. Can't wait to read your other stories.
| Guest chapter 33 . 12/4/2017
Truly enjoyed your writing! Thanks for sharing!
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| Guest chapter 26 . 12/3/2017
Love the background on Roberta's name change. You're an expert at seemlessly providing details and developing characters while moving the plot forward.
| Guest chapter 20 . 11/29/2017
Awe! At last!
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| kayk806 chapter 33 . 11/26/2017
beautifully written. thank you
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/23/2017
Fyrebyrd recommended your story on her fanfiction page. Can't wait to see where you take Bella & Edward!
| shannon30033 chapter 33 . 11/16/2017
I loved your story. It was so beautifully written. I liked Bella epiphany at Volterra and the resolution scene with Edward was moving. I liked how the characters moved through the story and how they grew together. Thanks! I loved reading it!
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/2/2017
Ugh ofc bellas a selfish bitch in this story too