|Reviews for The Proposal|
| Bubbles of Colours chapter 20 . 5/23/2013
Nice ending! I really liked your fic (:
| ww chapter 1 . 12/30/2012
this story is really good
| lisa.k.pot chapter 20 . 9/4/2012
| MimoRei13 chapter 20 . 8/3/2012
PERFECT ENDING! I'LL DEFINITELY READ UR OTHER STORIES! please create more eriolxtomoyo fanfics
| xxxFlamingWingsxxx chapter 20 . 5/27/2012
I really love this story! I've read this once some time ago and reread it again! It's so cute!
| EuroCuttie chapter 20 . 5/3/2012
I have been wondering for days why so many persons put your story in their favourites list. What made it so fascinating? I can see why now. This was worth reading and every second that I have spent on it. ExT's scenes of kissing and in the bed were very fun to read!
I dislike the idea that you killed off their daughter... something should have been done to make her alive. That would have made this story better, in my opinion.
The ending was very sweet, indeed. Congratulations for writing brilliant ExT stories! :) Hopefully less tragic ones in the future. :D
| Claudia Reese chapter 20 . 4/19/2012
That was the best ET fic I've read so far! That was truly wonderful. Thank you for the story :) And honestly, I cried when their baby died but I'm happy everything turned out well! I love it. Thank you. :)
| Marse Speaks chapter 20 . 3/30/2012
You've been plagiarized? D: I'm so sorry I wasn't able to help you with that. T_T I'd love to lecture people like that about copyright thingies. Oh well... at least, you won. :)
OH EM. I COULDN'T GET THE GRIN OUT OF MY FACE WHILE READING THE PART WHERE ERIOL'S DANCING WITH A YOUNG GIRL. LSKDJALSDALKDJ I mean, THAT'S FREAKIN' ADORAAABLE! I can imagine it and... LASDKJALDA soooo cuuuuuuuute
"The raven-haired Daidouji gulped down her words in reluctant."
- I think it should be "reluctance". Hmm...
"Can I take her back?"
- WHY SO POSSESSIVE? *A*
"... she could observe her best friends..."
- "best friend" only. :)
"I would be pleased if he calls you 'Hiiragizawa-san'…"
- HOW DARE YOU MAKE ME GRIN FOR SOOO LONG, SKY-NEE? GAAAAH... ERIOL YOU ADORABLE GUY YOU!
"…Because I already know what your answer will be."
- I need CPR. I just died because of squealing.
Okay, that's not connected at all, but really! LKSJDALDKSJDLKA
According to my mature opinion (HOHO! I LOVE YOU, ERIOL), this is the best ending that you could ever give this fic. It's perfect. The proposal that didn't need the "Will you marry me?" line is an epic proposal. :D
This fan fic is possibly one of the best stories that I've ever read. Even though you have some grammatical errors on the start, it doesn't matter 'cause you've got an interesting plot. This story deserves love. :)
I applaud you for keeping Eriol in character (aside from the OMG thingy that I read earlier, all is well... I think?). :) I salute you for the moments where Nakuru and Spinel appeared. Really. Most, if not all, are hilarious! XD Thumbs up for being able to show the friendship that bonds Sakura, Tomoyo, and Syaoran. I loved it.
Lastly, I'd love to give you a standing ovation for you hardwork in writing this. It may take time before you perfect your grammar, but I know you'll be able to write, someday, without the need of a beta.
I'm so happy that I'm one of the readers that discovered this story. Keep everything going, Sky-nee! :) LONG LIVE, THE [epic] PROPOSAL!
| Marse Speaks chapter 19 . 3/30/2012
KYAAAAAAAAAA! I hope nothing would be created because of their lovemaking. X3 Or... I guess it's all right? HOHO!
HAHAHAHAHA! I always find the scenes here with Nakuru and Spinel either amusing or funny. :)))))
"According to my mature opinion..."
- WHOA THERE! HAHAHAHAHA!
I'm reaaaally loving this story! X3
I'm so happy because of Eriol and Tomoyo, and I'm soooo excited because I don't have any idea of what may happen. (Or maybe I do have? 'Am thinking of them being married. Err...)
| Marse Speaks chapter 18 . 3/30/2012
I love how you're showing the development of their relationship after what happened. I kind of feel odd because these past few days when I wasn't back to reading things in FFN, I was in Wattpad, and all the stories I've read from there are written in first person point of view. (Even Matched and Pandemonium are written in the main girl protagonist's POV. Not that I mind it so much.) It's good to read something from third person POV. :3
"OH MY GOSH. Tomoyo, what the hell is this room?"
- Frankly speaking, I don't think "Oh my gosh" is a line that Eriol would say. I think "my God" is the line that suits him. Just an opinion, though. Erm...
O_O WHY WAS I GRINNING WHILE READING THE LAST PARTS? ALSKDJKLAJSDLKAJDLA
O_O your descriptions... LASKDJKLASDASL I've never read something that... err... hot? /shotshotshot
AND! (Phew! I almost submitted this one) I was cracking up while reading the parts where Eriol's being possessive. XD Really... Jake's just a kid! HAHAHA!
Thumbs up for this chapter, Sky-nee! :)
| Marse Speaks chapter 17 . 3/30/2012
"If he isn't, why did Tomoyo leave Tomoeda for America? And instead of chasing after her, that brat chose to live with lions and bears in the depths of Madagascar's forest?"
"Madagascar is NOT that wild, Syaoran. It's true that it's not a busy town or something, but still, some people do live there. Eriol just built his house in a secluded area, that's all. No bears, no lions. Only Nakuru-chan and Spinel. Who do you think he is? George of the jungle?"
- HAHAHAHA! The Madagascar thing. XD
"In the invitation addressed to me, Sakura wants Nakuru to accompany Yukito because Touya asked one of his colleagues to come with him. Of course, Spinel and Cerberus will make a cute couple of plushy dolls. People would be freaked out if they spot them talking.
- Applause for Cerberus X Spinel plushies! XD
"Don't you want to come with me? Surely, I'm better than most of the males in this world, inside out."
- Y U SO WISE, ERIOLMYLOVE? X3
"You win. I'll go with you. Happy now?"
"…Never been happier."
- WISE ERIOL, Y U HAVE TO BE SO COOL? Kyaaaaaaaa
"It's not like I had not seen you naked, Daidouji Tomoyo."
"But I'm not perverted enough to do that. Chill."
- Why did this sound like a hot Eriol is talking? O_O OH EM.
"Why so tense, Daidouji?"
- WHY SO HOT, ERIOL? LAKSJDALKDJLASKDJSL YOU LOVABLE CREATURE!
Oh my... he imitated... AKLSDLKSDLASDKLSAJ HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Looooooove this chapter to bits!
| Marse Speaks chapter 16 . 3/30/2012
"Don't tell me you're only interested in stupid dolls like Barbie. They are so boring. Plushies are much better, at least you can hug them when you sleep…"
- EPIC LINE! XD nice one there, dear :))
"THE BEACH. Somewhere in this earth."
- ! XD :))
"Well—I did expect us to stay in Italy or Vienna this time… or anywhere would be fine, actually. But why on earth did Eriol choose Madagascar?"
- WHUT. ! Why do I find this sooooo funny? HAHAHAHAHAHA!
"From all places in the world, why Madagascar?" Nakuru scowled, pouring her frustrations to the sea. "What the hell was he thinking of us? Alex? Gloria? Marty? Diego?"
"Diego is from Ice Age, idiot."
- ROFL. Really. ! XD
MOOOOORE LAUGHS. HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Oh dear... I'm loving the Madagascar thing. HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Epic. b(_)d
What's with the formality, you two? _
"And since I consider that we're partners for each other, I hereby ask you from the depth of my heart."
- I looooove this line! :D
It's getting more and more exciting! It seems like Eriol's enthusiastic about the pairing thingy on Sakura's wedding. XD
Great chapter! :D
| Marse Speaks chapter 15 . 3/30/2012
"Nakuru loves your cooking."
"…and so do I."
- SOOOO CHEESY
"Why on earth was she getting nervous?"
- One sentence: She's in love with him. /shotshotshot
"And in a swift motion, he was already embracing her from behind, his strong arms around her neck."
- WHY DOES THIS HAVE TO BE CHEESY? I'M SQUEALING! LKSJALKDJALDAS
"... and—this was the weirdest thing among all—that powerful magician treated her like a lady, lately. Not that he was a barbaric human before, but this small change surprised her, a bit."
- why did these lines cracked me up? XD
WAAAAAAAAAAAH! WHY DID THAT HAPPEN? I THOUGHT IT WAS ALL GOING TO BE ALL RIGHT. T_T
Anyway, nice chappie! I forgot to include that line in my previous review. x3
| Marse Speaks chapter 14 . 3/30/2012
SKY-NEE-CHAAAN! T_T I hope you still know me. This is Innocent's Sorrow. But you probably forgot about me already, seeing that I haven't been in FFN for a while. :(( Many things happened and I was so busy with school, buuut... since I already graduated (WOOT! College life, here I cooome!) I decided that I'll make up for the reviews that I wasn't able to give you. :) *glomps*
"I crushed her life into pieces and I want to fix it! I have to settle things right! I LOVE HER!"
- that moment when I finally read the words that I've been wanting to read, coming from Eriol. KYAAAAAA!
Really... Tomoyo's so blessed to have a family like Sakura's. (Yeah, including Syaoran :))
"No, Eriol felt as if he was stabbed right through the heart.
I would like to keep her too...
I would like both of you to stay..."
- these lines... made me tear up. T_T
"Vaguely, Tomoyo felt his large hand gripping the other side of the contract she was holding, and the next thing she heard was a ripping sound."
- I LOOOOOOVE this sentence.
NOOOOO! Okay, I'm being paranoid, but I really don't want Sakura and Syaoran to have some kind of problems. Especially now that they're going to marry. OTL
| woofyy chapter 20 . 2/20/2012
it's a good, interesting story ) though maybe next time it's best that you check your grammar before you upload it ? anyways good luckies with your future stories )