Reviews for After Dark
ThePizzadude93 chapter 1 . 1/29
"If his dad wasn't there to saved him"? You might want to fix that.
Lydia chapter 13 . 12/21/2014
Hey, actual reader on fanfiction, although I am making a new one because fanfic deleted my account for some reason...anyway... I just wanted to say that I have been reading you're story since you started and I really enjoy it, you're a really good writer, if you want any ideas I have got one, well, you know when Sean comes back from new jersey, (I know it's only for a few weeks) but could Sean be taller, say when he left he was around 5 foot and when he comes back he's 6 foot 6 and taller than mike & his friends, (let's say puberty kicked in early) sean also has a deeper voice and he's had a hair cut (like they are now a days, short not long like Sean had it in the movie) and can he have a bit of bonding moments between his brother & all his friends now he's 'mature' I know its a bit of a massive change, but it could be something that is really good for sean. He's also got a lot more muscle on him & when he comes back with his parents mike & his friends are outside waiting to greet them & mike doesn't recognize Sean & they start having a fist fight (okay maybe the trip to new jersey can be 6 months) and Andy finally recognizes Sean. I know it's a bit of a big change, but it could work, please keep writing the story
Guest chapter 6 . 3/30/2014
I love your story a lot. Please update soon.
jawssfan chapter 12 . 2/21/2014
My favourite part of the chapter is the relationship between tina and larry, the reason why i love it so much is because of the way he sticks up for her and how it seems to be getting easier for the teenagers, i really hope you keep the brody's in amity island and i really hope sean gets better can you get sean to see a someone to talk to like someone who has trained to help people and maybe the other teenagers can protest that the brody's won't go back to new york!
jawssuperfan chapter 1 . 2/21/2014
My favourite part of the chapter is when mike and larry are talking and the reason why i love it so much is because in the film we don't really get to see the teenagers have one and one conversations and because of that we don't really know how close they are. Also seeing your comment at the start why would someone do that? i know it's really childish and annoying, i know what it is like when you see reviews on your story and i think that people really like it, it's frustrating, i hope somebody stops doing it, you're writing is really improving and the story is really different!
Amelia Marie chapter 7 . 1/31/2014
Hey, i was wondering if you could do something where Mike is in Sean's room and he accidently knocks something over and theres's a book, mike picks it up and see's that there's hundreds of drawing of the shark and what happened whilst they where out at sea and sean takes it to his dad and friends and they show concern for the young boy
SARAH-LEE chapter 6 . 1/31/2014
CHARLE-MARIE chapter 5 . 1/31/2014
LINCOLN chapter 4 . 1/31/2014
HARRY chapter 3 . 1/31/2014
Guest chapter 1 . 1/31/2014
update update
Jawsfan23 chapter 7 . 1/29/2014
I always thought about how would sean cope with seeing merge being eaten. I know in the movie they had a bit of brotherly interaction with andy/sean whilst they where at sea but they never saw too much between sean/patrick, sean/larry, sean/bob, sean and the rest of the other teenagers. My favourite part of the movie is when they have rescued sean from the up-turned boat and it's after larry has just fallen in and been rescued also. Then there's that little moment after when Andy is "oh god i thought we'ved lost you, it's okay, it's okay." And then there's the bit straight after when Larry checks on Jackie and Brooke says. "we've just gotta keep her warm." then there's a quick shot of andy and sean hugging. It's sooooo cute. I was wondering if you do it from Mike, Timmy's and Polo's POV (Point of View) where they are on the lighthouse waiting for a rescue and there thinking about what has happened to the others and mike's thinking how sean is and where he is okay!
Daisy chapter 6 . 1/29/2014
Your writing is excellent, i've always wondered if this was real life how would the teenagers be affected by this and how they would deal with. I love the the interaction between larry and his dad, it would piss me off too if he'd ignored the shark warnings for the second time espically when his son was involved
Lucy-Jo chapter 5 . 1/29/2014
please update and could you focus the story on more of mike's friends relationship with sean and how it is before and after the shark attack
Marc Gilpin chapter 4 . 1/29/2014
Hey, HoneyBee1 i was directed to your story after ive been talking to one of your followers for quiet a longtime and if you want to know anything about the making of jaws 2 just message or reply to me by this a i'll give you my email
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