Reviews for The Paralyzer
khkrazy chapter 1 . 11/9/2010
That was awesome..good job! XDD
kestrel26 chapter 1 . 4/22/2010
Other than the lyrics being written out in this (I just don't like it in /any/ fic, not just this one, I think it disrupts the flow) I quite liked it. I loved the display of Axel's repetitive thoughts, over and over again, showing how what's happened to him is plaguing his mind and he can't get over it, his outright denial as to his own feelings and how he dumps all the blame on Roxas because he can't hangle it. And the contrast to all his emotional turmoil with that one line finishing it off showing his acceptance with Roxas, his love and his sexuality. I thought it was a very simple but extremely effective way of showing that. There are some grammatical errors like excessive commas and apostrophes and some of your sentences seem to be broken up randomly by full stops but other than that there is nothing wrong with this text. I enjoyed it and as silly a remark as it may be, I'm quite glad you've now introduced me to this new band
Bess chapter 1 . 4/3/2010
I like the fic, but I'm a perfectionist and just had to point out that the band is called Finger Eleven, not Eleven Fingers.
Midori Akita chapter 1 . 4/3/2010
Axel...straight? How much tea did you have? xD