|Reviews for Mein Vollkommener Beschützer|
| WeRiseAbove chapter 1 . 3/31
Okay I know this is gonna sound horrible like "I HATE YOU. NO OFFENSE." or something but the first chapter was sooo hard to follow. First it was a flashback and then I thought it was present time but then it went into multiple other flashbacks...? Back to present time in the weird scene where Toothless somehow grabbed Hiccup and flew away with him but it referred to it in past tense... (That is where I gave up) Plus why did Stoick hate dragons so much again? He's protective of Hiccup and I can see him glaring at the sky and shaking his head when Toothless gets mad or something but now he's threatening him... When does this even take place? Right after the first movie? Right before the second? It seems like this could become a really good story, it has a great plot, but I can't read a story I don't understand at all! And I'm not a bad reader, at all. So yeah. Well bye, sorry if you absolutely hate me now because this is such a horrible review... :/ :( I just got really mad reading this xD
| Crescental chapter 16 . 3/27
Loved the story, I just didn't want to stop reading once I started it :D
There were a few spelling errors here and there, but it didn't detract from the story in the slightest ;)
My only really complaint, though it was mostly my own problem, was that it was hard to remember what the chieftains and their sons and daughters looked like or what their relationships to other characters were
But anyway, I absolutely adored the story :D
| Fragments of Imagination chapter 16 . 1/25
Good story :)
| Keiri DeLaCruz chapter 14 . 10/2/2014
"WE'RE UNDER ATTACK!" Loved it! lol
| ivanganev1992 chapter 16 . 8/25/2014
Nice touching story with min bloodshed and for the died too bad of they had pure good hearths , for the bad naturally bad , unassepting , died in the surcubstances , personal living joy (favourite for Alvin befour " Ow God/Gods changed his point of view , great mighty warrior and fulfiling provably his dream to learn the secret who might becoming his entire tribe as allies to
| ivanganev1992 chapter 15 . 8/25/2014
I am so happy with the happy end . I little wonder from what will be used the half scull but it will be better than doing evil things rotting feeding evil and good monsters .
Is it possible to be build a house from the scull ?!
Healing whatever it is better than nothing and scaring the nice flying and landet souls who knows her or just seing her remains .
| ivanganev1992 chapter 8 . 8/25/2014
Han got the same wind of change if Hic try to show him . Han reminds me the kinder version of Gobber .
Ok for response here is my post :
| ivanganev1992 chapter 6 . 8/24/2014
Will Hic now try to learn draconese to talk with his friend . Well I'll see later . For response here is my post :
| ivanganev1992 chapter 3 . 8/22/2014
The love , the care , the ties , the ties seeing as overprotecti ness of this as a start not so good a little at least violent human eater to lovely friend and companqon , even a friendly shadow following and protective his friend feom any worries or keeping all the burden and suffering for himself .
And no pain and wound would allow to show weakness , if you show that you are hurt meaned that you are weak less defensive target . And the saddle as a simvol for all of this as a marring ring to us . And no injuries are beyond any injury .
Unfourtunatly that may ... kill the scaly person ignoring the hurting , the rust and infection .
Enouth talking I felt better after onouther reality shock . Fastwr by You . Your story , thanks ,
My post is :
Good night in Bulgaria is Augoust 2: 38 at night . what 's the time in which country in which mounth in You ?
| Yami no Tsuki chapter 2 . 7/15/2014
Okay never mind about that second question, BUT could you put a list of the German words at the start of the chapters, so we actually know what they are by the time we read them? Because otherwise (for me at least) it's really annoying because you KNOW it means something, but can't tell exactly what it is, so it's incredibly distracting.
| Yami no Tsuki chapter 1 . 7/15/2014
1) is this Hiccup/Toothless? Because it kinda seems like it...
2) is there actually a point to the German? Why can't you just say it in English, so we can understand it without having to interrupt the story?
| WatUCWatIC chapter 16 . 7/14/2014
T.T i freakin love galllin and his teeth!
| xXBlazingBlueXx chapter 1 . 7/5/2014
Why are they speaking German?
| mariexmarieclosedaccount chapter 5 . 5/28/2014
Your OC's are wonderful! I really like the bullied ones.
| Guest chapter 10 . 5/27/2014
I love your thoughts by Astrid at the beginning of her first segment. It also served to justify Hiccup's skittishness. Beyond his learned response to being snuck up on, anyone who is deep in thought can lose track of their surroundings. And as Hiccup attests himself in your story, he does a lot of thinking. Little character motivation scenes like this one are what really elevate your story from good to great. Kudos!