|Reviews for Control|
| Guest chapter 11 . 11/23
Your Harry is really stupid, spineless and pathetic. Just like the writer I imagine.
| MirrRistalnce chapter 4 . 10/7
I am a lot of years late to this, but I started reading this several years ago, and spent probably 3 hours looking for this, this morning. It was entirely worth it, because it is just as interesting and well written as I remember. If the author even checks these reviews anymore, thank you, genuinely thank you.
| ironhair chapter 11 . 9/25
Well, thank you for writing so far.
Hope you do add a go so chapter concluding what you meant to do with this.
| ironhair chapter 1 . 9/23
| Guest chapter 3 . 7/16
This is trash
| jaqmaq77 chapter 10 . 6/20
I can't believe Harry was that stupid again... I mean he did the same beyond stupid stuff again... I thought when he did it all the second time he would have been more careful... but every time I read a chapter I can't believe he can be so stupid a second time... But as they say, Those who can't remember the past are doomed forever to repeat it...
I think he should just cut his own throat and be done with the suicide... guy who wants to die that badly should just do it - my review of the last chapter the last time I read this says it all... Harry is a walk-off... you know - God had the souls lined up ready to get a brain and some of them walked off... Harry is a definite walk-off... You shine a light in his ear his eyes sparkle... the cheese has slid off the cracker... to confuse Harry you show him two shovels and tell him to take his pick... he thinks the London Underground is a political movement... he sat in the kitchen staring at a bottle of orange because it said concentrate... Harry used a computer to write a letter... you know it was Harry because of the Tipex... you know he did it twice because of the writing on the Tipex... His girlfriend had twins and Harry went out looking for the other guy...
| jaqmaq77 chapter 8 . 6/20
Somehow I'm glad this is unfinished... Because if Harry becomes more of a prick than he is at this point, if they circumcised him, it would weigh half a ton... and a Slytherin? I don't think so... at this point he comes across as thicker than Ron Weasley's kid when Ron mated with a female Goyle...
Come on... if his behaviour gets any more Gryffindor he'll have to request resorting... But I think I get it - the Dementor missed his soul and sucked out the tiny bit of common sense he started with and left a walking arsehole...
And Tracy? What the hell? Does her brain work at all? What's her next brain fart - walking into a room full of Death Eaters naked, announcing she's a half-blood and asking how many girls they have raped? Does she ever switch her brain on before she puts her mouth in gear?
Still, it is an interesting story... it's annoying enough to keep you interested...
| Aredianx chapter 9 . 6/17
How many times does he get to unlock his potential or something? This is the third time he had to call upon some hidden magic by screaming in rage. Really boring and stupid. Either have him be competent or not. It's like every single spell he casts has come from a desperate final attack of his will.
| Aredianx chapter 5 . 6/16
Seriously what's the point of keeping Harry's glasses? People can regrow bones for fuck's sake yet they can't fix a simple eyesight problem? And considering he is going to be fighting a lot, why the fuck would he choose to keep his glasses? It always annoyed me authors seem to have an attachment to the glasses to the point of obsession.
| vera841 chapter 7 . 5/25
I'm going to have to stop reading now, this just doesn't make sense to me anymore. The character vowed 1 thing: not to be controlled and he is just letting everyone control him, it's stupid.
Dumbledore came with an offer to get him out of Azkaban, Harry asked why, Dumbledore didn't say. I was sure the Harry you have written would just refuse outright, but he became Dumbledore's b**ch and gave up his fortune and everything too. This is very puzzling and not at all in line with the character of Harry. Then he wanted to evict squatters from his home, but didn't and just allowed them to be there for some reason (for a while anyway). Then he helped save people on the train and agrees to be rent-a-cop for Dumbledore, now he wants to be bound to compete in the tournament? At no point did he even get concessions from Dumbledore for any of this (not that it would have made it ok but still).
Harry was more free in Azkaban than what you're writing here. The way it should have gone is that Dumbledore came to Azkaban, gave Harry a deal, Harry asks why, Dumbledore doesn't say. Harry just outright refuses and says he will stay in Azkaban. Dumbledore is waffling about a bit and not understanding but still refusing to tell Harry anything. Harry says to get lost. Then Dumbledore is puzzled but leaves, now Harry leaves Azkaban with Bella on his own terms (escapes). If you don't want to keep Bella around that's fine, she can go back to Death Eaters or something. Harry gets out and sees that Dumbledore and ministry have stolen his inheritance, proceeds to get revenge by destroying both (which is the rest of the story). He can still get the Black lordship if you want, because Goblins probably don't care if someone escaped from Azkaban (that's actually canon I think). Get rid of squatters properly and so on.
I'm not saying I have a problem with how the story goes itself, it's fine, just that the character you set up in the first half of the fic isn't the one that I'm reading now. Literally the opposite, the character betrayed everything he said he believed in.
| vera841 chapter 2 . 5/24
Really like your style, especially how you write Harry's thought process.
| vera841 chapter 1 . 5/24
Really intense first chapter, love it!
| ratpoisonn chapter 11 . 4/26
Why do great stories gets dropped
| gginsc chapter 10 . 4/18
Did Dumbles put something in those lemon drops? Why is Harry acting so stupid? Why is he allowing Dumbles to control him?
| djohns9955 chapter 1 . 4/14
Nicely written, I think this has a lot of potential.