Reviews for Control
en extase chapter 1 . 4/4/2010
Beautifully written. Only baubles are using "amusement" too much, and the stock phrase "sought shelter in".

Stylistic touches like the minutes of freedom and the water droplet to intercut sections are brilliant.

The suspension of disbelief broke pretty badly when Harry successfully kills Aurors. He snaps, turns dark, etc. etc. but that doesn't transform him into a master duellist capable of fighting professionals. Perhaps if you'd emphasized the hesitation of the Aurors at seeing the Boy-Who-Lived, a young boy, facing them, that would be more believable.

Keep writing!
Dave.New chapter 1 . 4/4/2010
Hey hey!

I gotta say, this is a VERY good start to a story, I like the darkness, and the way you have the corruption of the dark arts explained by the chilling pleasentness that goes across Harry.

I'll assume that he was sorted in to Slytherin, and I'd be impressed to find out how he dealt with first year since we know of the ending to second.

The trial's he'll go though beyound here will be intresting, and I'd love to see some more!
Stalin's Pipe Organs chapter 1 . 4/4/2010
Awesome story man. There just aren't enough of these types of fics on this site.

One word of advice though. Although Harry's battle successes in this chapter can be explained away by luck and the aurors' surprise at having to fight him, remember that while Harry has just read a bunch of Dark Arts books, aurors have three years of advanced magical training under their belt. In future battles don't make the aurors so easy to kill.

Can't wait for the next update.
Fan chapter 1 . 4/3/2010
a good start keep it up and please don't make this slash.
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