|Reviews for The Leading Man|
| The Giant Daifuku chapter 2 . 5/30/2010
This is actually pretty good. My recommendation would be to check back for spelling and grammar errors, because sometimes you leave words out or spell homophones wrong (sorry, I sound like an english teacher) but I really like the descriptors. Please keep up the writing.
| XxXneonluvXxX chapter 2 . 4/7/2010
brilliant and i can't wait for more:)
| Spikey44 chapter 1 . 4/4/2010
Hi there, as promised have read over your first chapter; here are my thoughts. Firstly unless you intend to make the story more violent or include some more mature parts next chapter I would change the rating to T - more people will read it.
Secondly, you have the beginnings of an interesting story; involving the nethicite plot and the children in FFamran's escape is an interesting twist, especially as in the game Ffamran left before Cid began actively seeking nethicite and war with Dalmasca. It will be interesting to see where you go with this story next.
Finally keep going, keep writing.