Reviews for The Kiss
Ty chapter 1 . 7/20/2010
This is interesting, but it is spelled O'Neill, not O'Neal. You should get a beta reader to fix the grammar, but other than that it is AMAZING. Please write more.
MoonlightingFree chapter 1 . 5/28/2010
blahlolblah chapter 3 . 5/21/2010
YEAH DANIEL AND VALA! Daniel is soooo fine and he is mine. So back off! Just kidding you can have him but Jacob is mine. Lol. Great story it's my fav. Mwah mwah mwah.


People you totally have to read this story it's the bomb!

Oldlibrn chapter 3 . 5/20/2010
Very cute. I got confused by the uploading of what I thought were extra chapters. But ending on Chapter three was fine, I just didn't realize it was complete.

I thought your plot was funny and the characters sounded 'in character' it was just difficult to follow. A few more breaks between scenes and punctuation would have been a huge help.
steadfast chapter 1 . 5/17/2010
This is very cute, but so hard to read. Please consider finding a beta to help with spelling, grammar and punctuation.
Mandarax chapter 3 . 5/17/2010
The idea behind the story is sweet and it was in character msot of the time.

But I would suggest spell-checking the story and adding punctuation - it would make it an easier read.

Otherwise, good job!
ALIMOO1971 chapter 3 . 5/16/2010
Great chapter, i think that some one else should take that thing through the gate, please up date soon... oh you need a beta reader, have you found one yet
Oldlibrn chapter 2 . 5/16/2010
Another cute chapter. I like Sam & Jack having the same dream. I also think you should put some breaks between different scenes, it gets a little confusing. Though if you go back and reread you can usually figure out which conversation goes with which scene (usually. But I did have a little problem with the Cam dialog. Did he wake up Sam or Dr. Lam? I am still enjoying the story, it's fun.
ALIMOO1971 chapter 2 . 5/16/2010
Great chapter, but i found it confusinf, like you going back and fourth between normal and dream in every few line4s, you need to put some thing between them like XXXXXXXX or JSJSJSJS then we would know what normal and what dream. Please up date soon
elleelle chapter 2 . 5/16/2010
liking the story so far. hope to see more
elleelle chapter 1 . 5/15/2010
fun chapter. hope to see more
Oldlibrn chapter 1 . 4/29/2010
I like your story so far. Though D/V is now my favorite ship J/S is still the classic.

I got an Alert about another chapter being posted but I can't seem to access it? is anyone else having a problem?
ALIMOO1971 chapter 1 . 4/29/2010
Interesting first chapter, i wounder who next to kis? please up date soon
lastrequest chapter 1 . 4/29/2010
Nice start :) More please :)
gater62 chapter 1 . 4/29/2010
Interesting start, fun! One thing I would fix, is O'Neill (not O'Neal). That will drive me nuts.
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