|Reviews for Death princess|
| AliceCullen0629 chapter 18 . 1/27/2013
post the sequal soon please this is really good story
| Guest chapter 4 . 11/22/2012
why doesn't she just tell them!?
| desteptozaur chapter 11 . 10/22/2012
holy crap i cannot describe to you how epic your story is 3
| Guest chapter 17 . 9/9/2012
Wow...did not expect that
| Kuromei Aibyouka chapter 6 . 7/24/2012
Hi I'm nobody just a being who likes your story. Keep writing
| Eyanna Everdeen chapter 15 . 4/18/2012
Wazzup up with the constant screamin?
| caww chapter 17 . 12/27/2010
That makes sense now with the Cullen's arriving so fast when Bella called Alice.
I thought it was really cute how Alice found out that the Death Princess was Bella.
I'm glad Bella went back to Forks and found the momentos under the flooring.
I hope not everything happens in the dream...the humans being killed for one-maybe..instead Victoria get's caught by the guards and maybe Bella has to deal with her?
Can't wait to read the sequel and read more of your creativity and imagination.
| aesirborn chapter 2 . 12/27/2010
Dear, I don't mean to give you a bad day, but sometimes you gotta do what ya' gotta do.
I read it. Well, actually, I skimmed it. First thing: GET A BETA. The grammar is awful and distracts from the story.
Second thing: If you have came across another story like this, NO ONE HAS STOLEN YOUR IDEA. This plot has been done a thousand times when you have crack pairings, just look up Alec/Bella fics.
And continuing. The writing is mediocre at best, terrible at worst. I know at times MY writing can be pretty goddamn awful, but I admit too it. Your writing is extremely rushed. Tone down the pace a little and include more details. At best, you give a sketchy mental picture. At worst, I had no idea what was going on at all.
Secondly: Use the grammar and spell check on your word processor and get a good beta. Your grammar is awful, and it distracts from your writing. If you had amazing writing but still had bad grammar, I would still leave a negative review. When you begin a quotation, you have to capitalize it. IT LOOKS TACKY OTHERWISE.
One more piece of advice: Don't take an honest review as a flame. A flame is saying that the story is awful and giving no basis of why or how it could be improved. My review is a critique. I sent it too help you, so don't go whining about me in your next authors note.
| Zantana chapter 9 . 12/27/2010
good story! hehehehehehe! Alice found out her secret! LUV the story so much!
| shanniin chapter 17 . 11/19/2010
lovee this story (:
please continue soon (:
| ParamuseAngel chapter 4 . 11/2/2010
Do you know what's funny? You started this story on my birthday :D
| RiahhBaby chapter 15 . 10/17/2010
I love the story (:
| Maestro4EvarMore chapter 16 . 10/17/2010
Oh, I'm TOtally interested!
| natashar chapter 16 . 10/17/2010
cant wait foor more
| Maestro4EvarMore chapter 15 . 9/29/2010