I cried when I read about Charlie that's so sad what about her mother where is at

Absolutely loved this from beginning to end! Thank you so much for writing!

Renee was a WITCH!

I like the story but i do not like when you switch POVs thatstart over from a day or several days prior.

The tissues were definitely needed for this chapter! They are perfect for each other

What a crazy story she created in her mind!
Definitely Crazy Jane.

I know this story is long over and this review might not be read, but…

First, the story itself is great. The plot is well thought out and the characters have depth. I love that you led in all of possible ‘bad guys’ and kept us guessing about who it is. IMO, that’s a mark of a good writer.

Second, as well as the plot rolled, most of almost every chapter seemed to be lemons. I’m down for some good lemons, but honestly, I found myself scrolling past them, most of the time. I stopped reading them after the first few. They were repetitive and it left you with nothing to look forward to in future chapters. It’s like, “gah! Here they go again!”. Scroll, scroll, scroll. If you had limited their lemons, or at least limited how many you described action for action and word for word, and then in other chapters just give a nod to the fact that they had citrus time, I think there would have been more interest to read the entire chapters. The story line was just so good, it sort of killed it.

Third and final, I loved this more confident Bella. I loved her sass and how she was so open to possibilities instead of how she is written in almost every other fic story. I hate a cowering, sniveling, someone please tell me how to tie my shoes Bella. This Edward thought….I didn’t care much for. He is supposed to be a 32 year old man but he acts more like a teenage boy with too much testosterone and no idea how to handle it. His anger and the fact that he had to throw things and hit Emmett just to make himself feel better is juvenile and below the character. I understand anger, but his was portrayed too strongly. He gave me whiplash. One minute he is this caring, loving father and boyfriend and the next he flips out and can’t control his anger. If he was a real man, he would not be appealing to most women I don’t think. He’s sexy sure, but after a few times of him breaking glasses and hitting people because he can’t control his anger and find a better outlet for it, he would end up alone I think.

This story, well the first part of most chapters, held my attention and kept me coming back for more even with scrolling through the last half of most chapters.

Thank you for sharing and I apologize if I come across too critical. I just believe reviews aren’t always rainbows and butterflies, because you would never grow as an author if they were.

Ohhh thank you I made it to the end. Love the story, but …

Thank you for writing it.

Fuck…. Edward brought me to tears in This chapter with his dad. Man, I want to know who’s is fucking with them!

I am loving this story and I know it’s complete and up until now I have loved every chapter.

I know this is probably a silly whinge but lately I have been reading the longer stories because I want the beefiness of them. But I am finding that with these longer stories all the authors seem to be just putting fluff to beef them.

I’m up for the good times like everyone else, but I don’t need it in every second chapter to know how much BE love each other. I don’t need them poring at each other either.

You story is so amazing and with EB life merging together with the twins, I want to know how they are going to navigate it. Are they going to move out of the loft, buy a house together. They have so much to discuss it always seems to be put in the back burner so they can go T it like rabbits.

I am happy that they have a healthy sex life, but your story is amazing and way better than this kind of filler!

Plus I am impatient, I have 3 people in my head of who the stalker is… and I want to know who it is, all this fluff is getting in the way!

I just finished this for the second time. So well written with amazing character depth. I love the fact the whole family is integral to the story. Thank you.

32* my bad lol

Edward is 28 but acts like he’s 13.. okay she’s having fun with your family and your mad about that.. if my husband was like that I would’ve been like suck it up and grow up she’s not a doll

Thank you, I loved this story and this Edward.

HA!I KNEW it was Fucking Jane the pain.. Dang crazy bitch