|Reviews for Weak Wings|
| Vampcoffee chapter 1 . 11/24/2012
-like the mark on a keyboard.- This could clearer. As it is, I don't know what you mean.
-We're tired Crow- Names should be separated with a comma. There are several cases of this error.
Okay, so Akito and Agito are the same person.
Agito and Ikki obviously care about eachother, their scene together is touching. But what's keeping Nike from killing them?
-slashing a Fang before anyone could react.- What? That must be fandom thing.
-The man looked up at him from just behind a plane.- This is unclear. I am assuming an airplane.
The devices used to indicate strained speech, dashes and ellipses, are just a tad overdone and make it hard to get what's being said.
The comparison to an untrained bird was a good touch.
-The sky opened up- Is it raining?
If find your style to be very poetic with floweriness sometimes eclipsing the actual point of what you're trying to say.
| liarscantbetrusted chapter 1 . 5/9/2010
Cant even finish reading, tears streaming down face, need kleenex. Sorry way to sad, gonnna sob now, maybe read later and think about kicking puppies to not cry. Man, I'm a fan. Just shorten your paragraph please they look so clumpy!:)
| MackenzieWolf13 chapter 1 . 4/9/2010
Oh my was so sad i almost cryed after reading this *crying* this is the most saddest story I've ever read.
*sniff* you get fave stars for this story is awsome.-
Poor Agito,Akito and Lind.):
I hope they could finally rest in piece now and finally fly freely in the skies of heaven forever.:)
In memory of Akito,Agito and Lind Wanijima Love You!