Reviews for In My Life
slc6548 chapter 1 . 4/18/2010
God that was so sad - what a tear jerker.
sparagus chapter 1 . 4/17/2010
Wow. Completely heartbreaking. This was so great-my heart ached for Jasper. I tried really hard not to find fault with Edward here...but I can't help it. Makes me wanna hit him over the head with a bat...

Anyway. Very well done. Loved it :)
sugar rae chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
I had no business reading this right before bed. So incredibly sad. Please consider giving Jasper a HEA.
clairdeluneisgreat chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
*sobbs uncontrollably* You ladies killed me with this one. Total heartfail! Beautiful but tragic. Any chance you girls may revisit this one again someday?
kinney-69 chapter 1 . 4/14/2010
I never learn do I?...

Val Angst major heartbreak and endless crying...

Even with the hot boy smut, it made me cry even more.

As always, beautifully written but it always "bothers" (I am being polite...) me when Bella gets in the way of these boys...:(

I could comment on just about every sentence in this story and how it tore my heart to pieces, from how Edward realized how he had neglected Jasper since he met Bella, to their night together and to Jasper's sacrifice of his own happiness, but I just can''s too emotional and I can't go back and read it again, it's just too difficult for me.

So, sequel...? Please?

Edward did agree when Jasper said he could love him so much better than her...

If you love Jasper as much as I do, how can you leave him like this, heartbroken and alone?...*sniff*

Loved how you got the Beatles lyrics in there:)
sweetandsaltyff chapter 1 . 4/13/2010
Wow, this is heartbreaking but beautiful. The story is sad, very, very sad...but, it actually happens that way in reality sometimes and you captured both the pain of unrequited love and the strength of friendship that is selfless enough to overcome that devastation in favor of being there for a friend who needs you by their side.

Without ever exploring Bella's character you managed to present her in a beautifully feminine way and wrote a very convincing love between her and Edward.

It seems to me that often times in fandom/fanfic people are so anxious for their favorite pairing to have a HEA that sometimes reality is ignored. You did a brave and important thing here by making this story about Jaspers pain, about Edwards true love, without pandering to those who want to believe that E/J *belong together* and therefore Edward is making a huge mistake/sacrifice. What you did instead is show how multifaceted love it is possible that Edward *does* have love for Jasper, even romantic love, but that ultimately he is MORE in love with Bella. I'm so glad you did this with your story. And I hope that made even a lick of sense in conveying what I mean...Hearts are big enough to love more than one person, in more than one way, and ultimately we have to make our decisions based on what we feel deeply in our hearts is right for us, who we belong with. Edward made the right choice for himself in the end and I'm glad about that even if it was at Jaspers expense.

Another theme you explored here that I am grateful for is the idea that a generally heterosexual man can have attraction to another man and even act on it without having a giant crisis of sexual identity. Our culture has moved toward acceptance of women exploring their sexuality with other women but still maintaining a primarily straight is so hypocritical that when it comes to men, anyone who has ever explored or experimented or even had romantic feelings about another man are automatically determined to be gay.

Anyway, that is probably much more complex than you were hoping for, but I appreciated the different approach you took here, it obviously resonated with me, and as always, your writing style was impossibly enjoyable. Love it, always! (fistpump for M&A, one of the best stories out there!)
vampirelover44 chapter 1 . 4/12/2010
Hi Touchstone,

Is this a once off story? If yes, uwah! ( that's a wail BTW) - Im crying a storm for Jasper...

"I could love you so much better than her" - Damn you Edward for hurting my Jasper..I mean..our Jasper...

This was great, even if it made me cry all the way from the first line to the last. I just.. I just cannot stand the idea of one of these boys being torn to pieces - ok who am i kidding esp if its Jasper!

This was very emotional. You have my tears. Lots.

Note: You know you could make it all better for Jasper... it can be one extra're a fantastic writer, you can do it..
vampiricpen chapter 1 . 4/11/2010
Oh my, that was really, really sad. So well written. A story of life - it doesn't always flow the way we'd wish it to...
Rhea Bleu chapter 1 . 4/11/2010
definately needs a sequel . edward needs to realise the mistake e made
robownsme chapter 1 . 4/10/2010
That was just beautifully written. I don't often cry while reading a o/s but the tears are flowing right now. It was just so easy to relate to both of them in this. Everyone knows what it's like to love someone from afar and you both just captured it perfectly. The pain from Jasper's pov was just so real and heartbreaking! Thank you for this.
elf warrior princess chapter 1 . 4/10/2010
i cried.
ladydread81 chapter 1 . 4/10/2010
*sobs* omg...
jennyap chapter 1 . 4/10/2010
Wonderfully written! gr8 job, so sad!
Poetry-for-fish chapter 1 . 4/10/2010

I've just cried reading your story, it's amazing piece of work. Jasper 's part is heartbreaking.

thank you for this moment.
Julestwentysix chapter 1 . 4/10/2010
Beautifully written but so very sad. Jx
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