|Reviews for Whispers of the Water|
| Serpentdragon chapter 24 . 2/7
Nice chapter. I liked the addition of Shera's future to what Hari of the Future. Said, my one criticism is still about the way the dialogue-actions are done. You keep putting the dialogue of the person who spoke in the section about the actions of the next character. For example, near the end, you had Shera tell Vahn to let the group know if he got tired and then had Vahn's physical response. In writing, a section like that should have one character's actions and dialogues together in the same one. Other than that, though, it was well done.
| thegood77 chapter 1 . 12/28/2013
this story is great i just finished the first chapter and i can tell this is gonna be a great story
| Serpentdragon chapter 23 . 12/14/2013
I like that you're giving Shera a weapon unused by the other Ra-Seru heroes rather than having her use the tonfa like Noa. Though, still, the dialogue seems slightly confusing. The way it is written right now kinda splits who is talking and doing what action. But overall, I enjoyed the chapter.
| Serpentdragon chapter 22 . 5/31/2013
Once again, nice chapter. If you are looking for constructive criticism, though, I find the way that you put who is ding the quotations kind of confusing sometimes. It's like after the quotation, rather than being like, "Vahn/Shera/etc said," you have "Shera nodded at Gala's wprd,"etc. It just takes a second or so to figure out who said what. Other than that, I enjoyed the chapter.
Question: Can we expect to see the other three Ra-Seru?
| Serpentdragon chapter 21 . 5/29/2013
I liked this chapter. Well done. Looking forward to the next one
| Serpentdragon chapter 20 . 5/27/2013
LOL About the logistics. I can understand that. But good chapter. Things are certainly getting interesting now that Cara has appeared.
| Serpentdragon chapter 19 . 5/25/2013
Glad to see another chapter up this soon. Looking forward to the next one
| Serpentdragon chapter 18 . 5/20/2013
Nice job. Glad to see another chapter up so quickly. Looking forward to the next one.
| Serpentdragon chapter 17 . 5/19/2013
Glad to see this story is continuing! :) It was a bit of a slower chapter, not much in terms of action, but it was a nice chapter for showing the characters and everything. Looking forward to the next one.
| Serpentdragon chapter 16 . 12/3/2012
I am so glad to see the story updated again. I would have liked for a little more action, but oh well, it was still an awesome chapter :)
| Serpentdragon chapter 15 . 8/9/2012
Hooray! Another great chapter! It was well done, and I am glad Shera has her Ra-Seru now. Also, I am very impressed that even though she clearly became more powerful with Mule, you didn't make Shera suddenly overpowered.
| Lumiere D'Amour chapter 14 . 6/21/2012
...(Gives you death glare.) You HAD to end it right here? Did you really have to? Now you're torturing me by making me wait! I wanna know what's goin' on with Deven! I WANNA KNOW! Fine, I'll wait. And yes, I do think she'll wind up with a Ra-Seru, and it will most likely be mule. In the game, the trio wound with 3 Ra-Seru, Songi wound up with one, and then the 3 used to make the generators, only wind up making 7 of the Ra-Seru in the game. Horn wound up with Cara, which makes 8 that we know of. However, the game never says anything about the Genesis Trees in Jeremi, Ratayu or in Sol bearing Ra-Seru, so we don't know if Mule or Palma might wind up being in those trees in this story. But sometimes you might wind up making the Genesis Tree in Jeremi, or Ratayu, harbor Mule, and she will bond to Shera! So I think I have a bit of your plot figured out, but we'll have to see. I WANNA KNOW SO BAD! You're mean, Dreylen, making me wait. XD You're good at that, lol.
| Serpentdragon chapter 14 . 6/20/2012
Oh, this is getting so good! xD Glad you gave a new update so soon ) Can't wait for the next one where she'll hopefully get a Ra-Seru! D
| Lumiere D'Amour chapter 13 . 6/19/2012
Glad to see you finally updated! I was checking on here everyday for the last week, thinking, "I hope she's updated!" And then "Gah!" when I saw there wasn't, lol. I like the character development you put in this chapter between the characters. I can relationships starting to form somewhat, especially between Vahn and Shera. Obviously, Vahn's quite protective of Shera. I know you said you didn't intend for them to be a couple, but I can honestly see it going that. Just the way they act around each other just gets me that feeling. And Gala and Shera...typical sibling rivalry! They act a lot like bickering brother and sister. Good job with character development. And are they gonna go find Shera's brother any time soon? I wanna read more about Deven! I bet that'll be one good chapter. Update soon! Hikari wants more! (Gives puppy dog eyes.)
| kenegi chapter 13 . 6/17/2012
Well at least you made them more human, especialy Shera since she is the more human of the four.