Reviews for What If?
TyDM chapter 6 . 5/28
The fact that Dumbles came to his senses in Chapter 6 does not make up for all the crap he did to hurt Harry for the first 15 years of his life. Until Dumbledore confesses and accepts punishment, he is a dark evil #$.
TyDM chapter 5 . 5/28
As of Chapter 5, Dumbledore's plan is quite obviously stupid.
If the prophecy states that two warriors of light must "stand side by side against the darkness, or should they stand alone, fall to eternal Darkness" then Dumbledore shouldn't have been antagonizing Harry and should have been doing everything in his power to prepare Harry to fight another wizard. ... Dumbledore's actions are obviously stupid and counterproductive; he is making Harry not trust him and not want to "stand side by side".
Also, what the heck does a marriage contract or giving the Weasley's 50% of Harry's property have to do with the fulfillment of the prophecy OR work towards making Harry want to trust the long-bearded-weirdo?!
rdk646260 chapter 18 . 5/20
Y'know, dying and coming back to life loses its luster when you do it three times. His death and resurrection is supposed to mean something, three times (though the first was fake) just makes it redundant.
pincho chapter 17 . 5/14
Harry seeing through voldy was wierd and doesn't fit since the horcrux is gone. It just makes no sense whatsoever, like Ron being able to open the chamber by mimicking hisses.
pincho chapter 17 . 5/14
I say the same as when Harry killed the locket. Occlumency. Also, so far there hasn't been much evidence that Hermione is part of the prophecy, she is a shadow cat and she's engaged with Harry thats about it so far.
pincho chapter 16 . 5/14
Ok story has gone to crap. Harry is tied to a chair, his captors less than a few feet away, he can stun wandlessly at a minimum (it wasn't bothered to mention what else he can do but was mentioned he could do a lot of spells lower, finite would be included as its a first year spell) and there is more than a 90% chance that his arms are bound to the chairs arms than behind him.

There is absolutely no reason for him to get tortured other than forced drama.
pincho chapter 15 . 5/14
Meh. There was no reason for the locket to affect Harry with his supposedly strong occlumency shields. On top of that there was no reason to believe an illusion that was not all encompassing. He literally saw Hermione break Ron's nose for grabbing her ass and they haven't been friends with him for years now.

Now if it had been Krum or some other random boy or even a grown man it would be a little better but not by much.
pincho chapter 15 . 5/14
Why did Harry state "The last remaining ones are Hufflepuffs cup, Ravenclaws Diadem, and an unknown object. We destroy those before we hit Riddle."

He and Dumbledore know the locket is a Horcrux, they literally grabbed a replica with the note from Regulus.
pincho chapter 14 . 5/14
Massive issues with continuity and just plain making sense.

Harry hasn't stepped foot on Privet drive since summer of third year. There was absolutely no reason for anything that happened there.

Harry jumped on a broom that Sirius' motorcycle couldn't outrun, how the hell does he all of a sudden go fast enough to catch up to said broom going full speed away from him? It is either not possible or Hagrid was purposely not outrunning the death eaters.

How do death eaters apparate into the crowd when Harry and Hermione have to get to an apparition point to leave?

In the next chapter Sirius references Hermione as Harry's girlfriend, he was there for the proposal and they have been engaged for almost 2 years.
Pincho chapter 13 . 5/14
Heh, you were coming as I was going
Nick chapter 20 . 4/28
It was great
BlazeStryker chapter 9 . 4/3
SO! You're a Headbastardry supporter.
Goodbye.
Siriusmunchkin chapter 20 . 2/1
Brilliant story! Great characters and lots of fun
Siriusmunchkin chapter 17 . 2/1
YES!
Rabbitfaster chapter 1 . 1/31
You need to remove the summary and disclaimer from every chapter. It is only ever needed in the summary of the actual fic. Its acceptable in chaoter one since back in the day everyone was reasonably afraid of being sued. It is unnecessary and makes using text ti speech apps difficult when every chapter has a full repeat. Breaks immersion and makes it not worth listening to. For a silent part of the audience we HAVE to use these types of media to enjoy other media. Im sure this story was excellent going off the other teviews. I wish you luck in the futute
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