Reviews for A Stagecoach Named Desire
AMomWhoWrites chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
So um yeah...I said I'd review, but I want to re-iterate that I expect to see a Chapter 2 because this idea is priceless and simply can not be wasted ;)

I'll even make you rice krispie treats! Although I may buy them from the bakery and make it look like I did it, but you'll get rice krispie treats none the less! I'll even add chocolate and have a bottle of wine! I'm sure I still have a vial of Moonshine around here somewhere!

I think the idea is brilliant and funny and something I haven't read before, but hope it's continued. I loved timed pieces and anything that ends with Charlie actually holding a gun to someone's head requires more. It's a fact in the rules of "How to Write Fan Fiction"...seriously, you can google it ;)

As far as Elemental, I do hope you get back to that one soon, but until then just write this one! It's win/win really!

Hope you're having a good day, see you on twitter :)

3 Kelly
twiradical chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
This was a great one shot, and I laughed loud at what Charlie said at the end :D

Do you think you'll ever continue this one shot into a short story or something?

Thanks for the one shot and I hope your Muse returns sooner than later,

HopeStreet chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
I love period stories! This is too darn funny that Edward is facing a shotgun wedding! I hope the ladies give you another prompt soon!
ReDish chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
Woo hoo, shotgun wedding! Surely you can give us another half chapter or so with it...
hippogriff-tamer chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
LOL this line made me laugh so hard...

The next thing Edward knew, he was being roughly poked in the side. Annoyed, he opened his eyes to see Sheriff Swan standing over him with a shotgun.

Great story TB and I hope that your muse for Elemental comes back..maybe you can use one of Sheriff Swan's lassos to hone it in...once he decides not to shoot Edward...

sscana chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
I loved it. The Victoria and James reference made me lol. Good thing he kept day dreaming about being with her forever, because he just got his wish. I loved the ending. Next chapter wedding? Guess he's not going to Cali now. I do miss elemental and I know it will be fabulous when you update. Thanks for the new story. I'm already in love.
michswan chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
*snort* :)
MarianneNorthmanCullen chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
I loved the o/s and I won't bitch about Elemental (Yeah I know that this is a first...)


xxxDELETEDxxx chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
*snicker* You know how much I love this story. It'd only be better if Bella WAS a goat. But I know you probably have "standards" and "rules" about implied bestiality. *sigh* ;) Love ya!


betwl chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
LOL at the ending but I thought that it was good. I like about what he thought about when they were in the act and it was just a great story :)

Good job!
robfans chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
that was nice love it
ElspethGordie chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
Loved it! I love how Bella mentioned her goats-lol. And it was awesome when Charlie woke them up with a gun, and Edward instinctively protected Bella. I do miss Elemental! but this was a fun read, and I'm glad to have anything from you!
secamimom chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
Oh shit. I would really love to know what happens next, if you'd like to write that *hint, hint* LOL. Loved it!
TamoraJ chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
Well, that was pretty much just lemons, but I loved the ending.

It was a bit unrealistic as far as the time period goes, simply because there was no talk of affection, marriage, or the future.

People simply didn't do casual sex in that place and time. Not unless you were a dance hall girl and getting paid for it-or at least expecting your lover to set you up someplace and pay for your keep.

Even someone completely naive and innocent like Bella would have known better than to let a man touch her intimately, even if she didn't realize exactly where things were headed.

And only a scoundrel would sleep with a respectable girl-especially the daughter of a sheriff. At least, without declaring his intentions first. I don't pretend to believe that the ideal of sex only after marriage was strictly observed, but certain standards of behavior were expected, and anyone who didn't live up to them (or at least, give the appearance of living up to them) was considered reprehensible.

It's true that people would look the other way, or pretend to, if a couple got engaged and then had an unexpectedly early baby after the wedding. But "love em and leave em" was for the slime of society only. Prostitution existed, but wasn't acknowledged. Bastard children had difficulty getting jobs and being accepted by people in general-or at least, anyone who knew the circumstances of their birth. There was an unfortunate belief that the sins of the parents would reflect in the character of the child.

However, the ending was quite believable historically and very funny. I'd love to see a continuation of this-except that it might delay Elemental. How is footloose Edward going to deal with a shotgun wedding? Is he going to try and run or otherwise get out of the wedding-and how will Bella react to that? Will she be willing to marry him if she thinks he doesn't want it-and will Charlie make them both go through with it anyway? If he runs, will he do it before or after the wedding? How far is Charlie's reach? How does Bella feel about being married to someone who might or might not want her for anything more than what just happened in the barn, even if he doesn't send a clear message by trying to run? What was he planning on doing in California? Will he stay in Forks or take Bella to California with him? Did Bella get pregnant? What does Edward do for a living? Where did he come from? Where's Renee? Dead? Or living it up as a dance hall girl in a saloon somewhere?
RoseArcadia chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
Damn! That was awesome!
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