Reviews for second chances
One reader chapter 10 . 1/9
Ahh! I want to scream, I like the story and the pairing. But everything just bullshit, names are wrong, grammar and spelling needs work. Format funny, ages are wrong and events are in correct. I can understand, why you would use the village as destroy durning Naru time line. But still, can't you put this as an AU or explain, why some of the choices you have made went into this story to begin with.
Guest chapter 2 . 12/9/2017
I was reading with extreme interest until I got to asuma hiruzen I face planted when I read that now my phone has a huge crack in it anyways sarutobi is his last name hiruzen sarutobi is his dad's name hope it's a good story anyways
misha.teunisse chapter 25 . 10/3/2017
very nice
Guest chapter 4 . 6/13/2017
Ummmmm... I'm fairly certain that Kurama and Madara didn't make a pact to destroy the village. It was more like Kurama was ripped out of Kushina's gut, and then was controlled by Madara's sharingan by force.
Guest chapter 4 . 6/12/2017
You know how Naruto (male Naruto) looks like Minato? Then even if Naruto is femal then shouldn't she resemble Minato too? Also with the resemblance between Naru and Minato shouldn't the Hokage question it?
sammy.dodger.57 chapter 1 . 5/14/2017
i can't say there's very much won't with the story. sure your grammar needs some work on but other wise it's a great story. the only actual problem i had with it was itachis age. he was only five during the kyuubi attack but you've changed a lot of the original time line so I've just been ignoring it for the most part
rukxichi.15 chapter 5 . 2/24/2017
Good story
jaraiyatribute chapter 65 . 2/9/2017
65 chapters...65 cha...65 FLIPPING CHAPTERS AND YOU DIDNT EVEN FINISH IT?!
Faery66 chapter 65 . 12/11/2016
Hope to read more soon.

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Bananabella chapter 19 . 12/3/2016
My thoughts when reading your fanfiction, this one :
Bleh
Ugh
Nice
Grammar
Just bullshit idfk
Is great fanfic 10/10/10
Bananabella chapter 9 . 12/3/2016
I have only one suggestion: get a beta. Your stories are great, the timeline is great the characters are well in character for the situations, and the only problem I have with it is the grammar and lack thereof. Everything else is fine, really.
Guest chapter 11 . 11/30/2016
I know that this was written a while ago but itachi was only around 5 when the kyuubi attack happend. So your time is really screwed up, it's impossible that he's already a high ranked ninja or together with Minato. And maybe you should take a beta or something for any other stories that you'll write because your grammer can use a little help.
Fable Linked chapter 65 . 8/5/2016
I am very disappointed... T-T
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I wanted more... and this fanfic hasn't been updated I'm 3 years plus.
Fable Linked chapter 63 . 8/5/2016
Girls had wolf ears.
Fable Linked chapter 62 . 8/5/2016
You said the symbol was carved into her breast not her stomach.
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