|Reviews for Forging and Temperance|
| neb1234 chapter 1 . 4/16/2010
I didn't really like the fact that Ranma was completely manipulated like he was but, the story and the ending in particular were so very welly done it made up for it.
| King Tarol chapter 1 . 4/16/2010
You have talent. That much is very clear.
The story was a little jumpy at times, like I couldn't tell exactly who was speaking when, although I do not include the times where you did that on purpose for the sake of the plot.
I honestly don't know if "weird" is the correct description for your story. It's intriguing, it's well-layered, it's mostly flowing (except for the few jumpy bits I mentioned), and it's downright heartbreaking at times, but that gives this story a rare beauty. Even compared with other Ranma/Sailor Moon crossovers with a similar theme, yours has the feel of a sad song that one wouldn't want to stop listening to, while a good portion of the others simply lump the emotion. You weave it, if the imagery makes any sense. And by the fact that you have 26 stories here, I get the feeling that you've been weaving emotions for a while.
You did something with the plot that I commend heartily: while most write that Pluto "can't" see through time for any given reason in Ranma/Sailor Moon fanfics, you rather wrote that she CHOSE NOT TO. In that choice, you humanized Sailor Pluto in a very big way, while still managing to show her mysterious and powerful side through all her other actions. This is a rare and delicate balance.
And further, through that, you brought out the true tragedy towards which you caused this story to inevitably spiral. That is a deep plot, without only being convoluted. A very large part of me likes happy endings for all, and so I thus would've liked to see more chapters dealing with this situation. However, I know better; your story had to end this way.
An extremely elegant work, and I'm truly appreciative to see that you've given it to us all.
| Exodus5 chapter 1 . 4/16/2010
Nice story but can't Setsuna just go back in time again and fix it?
| m.night chapter 1 . 4/16/2010
What a twist!
| ix chapter 1 . 4/16/2010
cheer up emo kid
| Newbie Reader 117 chapter 1 . 4/16/2010
Wow, now ain't that a kick in the rear end. Poor girl, I feel for Setsuna here. Good story this, hope to see you write more like stories like this, maby even a sequel.
| Guest chapter 1 . 4/16/2010
setsuna, she's a cun.t
| Eh chapter 1 . 4/16/2010
I remember reading this a long time ago. But I don't remember it being any different. In any case, it is just as bitter as the old one and just as moving. Though I have to agree with the other, about how it's more like a series of scenes to write around.
| Jace chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
Thia has to be the saddest happy end ever. Although they do have a long time ahead of them, so perhaps someday...
| TikiTDO chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
That was the most amazingly bittersweet story I have ever read in my life. Bravo sir. You do some amazing work.
| Kuno-Baby chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
Quite an ending you got there.
| mikaerusan chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
I read this once, a long time ago. I am glad to have come across it again. For sometimes a journey can circle upon itself while still moving forward.
| Grinnerz chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
A good story, but not one I think I'll be reading again anytime soon, no offense. It's just it was a depressing opening and a hopeful middle leading to a depressing end. I just prefer stories that the characters, the ones I find sympathetic at least, all get their happy ending; or something other than weeping their eyes out over their lost love at any rate.
| SFBKludge chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
Semi-decent story. The big problem I had with it was that there wasn't any real continuing narrative. This looked more like a fleshy out line with scenes written to insert into completed full chapters.
| Riniko22 chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
Well that's a slap to the face, her own face it seems. If I read this right Setsuna gave her husband away to Minako/Ukyo because she thought that he really did not love her but his sister. I'm not sure I feel that sorry for her, as she arranged it so that all those people died to fit her plan and it was flawed with partial information. Truly, I suspected that she was the wife, but thought that he would reject the senshi when he learned how he was manipulated.