Reviews for Blue Ribbon
Lord Dark Horn chapter 1 . 2/6/2013
Trolllface LaVista chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
Technically impossible for a ribbon to be tied as a mobius strip in hair you know. If you don't understand, look up "mobius strip" in the dictionary.
Bondubras of Devoncroix chapter 1 . 10/29/2011
I like the interpretation as to why Mobius has the ribbon.

The motivation is believable and makes sense.

Good job!

Zan67 chapter 1 . 11/26/2010
Hmm. Not bad. However, you really do need to work on spelling and grammar. Rewording some of the sentences would be a good idea as well. Also, it might be a good idea to add more, perhaps, to the story. Maybe explain the Mobius 1's family more than just giving their names and who his mother and father are. I'm not saying make this into a multi-chapter story, as I'm sure you just want a short story. But something longer than this would be a lot more pleasant to the reader.

This, of course, is all just my opinion. I hope you don't take offense to any of these suggestions, and maybe follow some of them. I like your idea of why Mobius One uses a ribbon insignia.
Mercenary Flyer chapter 1 . 4/18/2010
Hmm interesting take on the infamous Ribbon.

One question, I'm pretty sure Alexis is a girl's name. Did you mean Alexei or Alex for Mobius One's first name?