Reviews for Life as Newlyweds: Comment and criticisms
louiseramz chapter 1 . 8/14/2013
haha... they are so cute together...thanks for writing this.. :)
Kaidious chapter 1 . 1/28/2013
Kawaiiiiiiii :3

Thanks for writing! It was awesome.
Quill Princess chapter 1 . 12/31/2011
Just like Hikari to speak bad things about Kei in her dreams. lol.
PockyLover146 chapter 1 . 1/5/2011
It was sooo cute! I love it! I hope you continue with your genius works of arts! , .
thenamesiggykirkland chapter 1 . 9/6/2010
So sweet! I really enjoyed it! The only criticism that I have is that sometimes your sentences are badly written, but that's all! Well done!
Devilishduck chapter 1 . 7/1/2010
LOL - I love how your one-shots always have a funny twist to them xD

"Each critique made his muscles tightened in his jaw and fists" - good detail on which body parts tightend

**"pulled the quilt sheets up her."

That sounds kinda funny to me, maybe try "pulled the quilt sheets up [to] her [shoulders]." or something. :)
mizchelz chapter 1 . 6/15/2010
such a cute story! so so fluffy! :3
NoxHeiress chapter 1 . 6/14/2010
LOL. Funny. But I'd like to make a correction.

It's *density*, not *denseness*.

ershin chapter 1 . 5/7/2010
Well, short doesn't mean bad. Sweet though, haha. I like it!
Maybe Hikari mumbled something like 'i love you' to Kei, correct? Haha, it's just 'maybe' though..

Thanks for the sweet story :)
broken-paige chapter 1 . 4/19/2010
So sweet. Amazing use of words.
CherryBlossom210 chapter 1 . 4/18/2010
Not bad...short but really well done.
Mikachan105 chapter 1 . 4/18/2010
Hey readers, if you're reading this. Guess what did Hikari mumble to Kei. The last critique/compliment~
Aquile Storm chapter 1 . 4/17/2010

This is THE kind of fluff I was searching for~ :D And thank you so much for dedicating it for me *huggles you*

Ok, I have to admit, I'm sorry. I totally depicted that as IchiRuki in my head XD I can't help it! They are love!

But THIS is love too! So cute so cute! *sniffle*