|Reviews for The Dance|
| Poodie chapter 1 . 8/22/2013
I recently read this story and it was AMAZING! It inspired me in many ways! Your an amazing writer! Even my 17 yr old sister loved it! She can't get over it! And even she said your an amazing writer! Please continue making new stories on their teenage life!
| BronyCentral chapter 19 . 8/1/2013
POWER TO THE PILLOWS!
| BronyCentral chapter 32 . 8/1/2013
Danny and Stacey, *went through the screen and gives them a deadly glare and yells at them*," You two are the worst people ever, worse then Brooke in finding happiness, you are like her combined! You better watch your body because you might go to the hospital sleeping or you will never EVEr wake up, and if are still alive ! I will literally strangle you! So be on your feet, because I'm comin' and I borrowed, Amulet's chainsaw. MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAWAHAHA
| Guest chapter 19 . 5/15/2013
power to the pillows (chloe)
| Sourpatch27 chapter 25 . 5/5/2013
Not to be carping or rude, but I just feel when you make the characters declare a sentence with the word 'orbs', it's out of their character. Just a little tip for when you're writing, when it's from the character's point of view, never use 'orb' when ascribing to their eyes. Well, unless it's in their character. Only choose to insert 'orbs' when you're writing from an omniscient understanding of all your characters. I give you credit, because it is hard trying to use a substitute for 'eyes', but in my opinion, I would only use it in omniscient to portray a growth in a romantic relationship. For example:
At last, Wally came to a final conclusion on what he wanted..
'It's always been Kuki,' he internally realized, 'I've never even liked that cruddy Stacey. I've only ever loved-'
"Wally?" He looked down into those dark chocoate orbs he'd come to love and memorize over the years.
I'm sorry if I wasted your time or you don't really care, but it honestly killed me to see the characters use 'orbs', because we all know that Wally has not one idea of what it means!
But granting, I love the plot developement and the realistic conflict you've created for them! Keep it up, KNDfangirl. _
| blackdyingrosegothgirl chapter 10 . 4/13/2013
DANNY HOW DARE HE TRYS TO TAKE OVER KUKI LIKE THAT
| Guest chapter 35 . 4/2/2013
| Guest chapter 33 . 2/2/2013
Am I the only one who laughed so hard they couldn't breathe, when Wally FINALLY got the for/four thing? :P
| Guest chapter 19 . 2/1/2013
I love this chapter mainly on the fact that this sleepover reminds me of me and my friends.
| catspats31 chapter 1 . 1/31/2013
Here are my pros and cons for this story, which will sum up my review:
1. You did a good job at keeping some of the original characters like Mushi and Harvey in character.
2. The story setup is good and you know your target audience.
1. The plot is driven too much by your reviews, and it is noticeable in the second half of this story.
2. The author's notes at the start and end of most chapters are too long due to skits that have little or nothing to do with the plot.
3. The fourth wall is broken too much due to your bloopers in chapter 17, your interaction with the characters in the skits, and inserting yourself in chapter 21.
4. The pacing and flow is disrupted by constant point-of-view switching and flashbacks.
5. The story contains musical lyrics that are not in the public domain.
Because of those things, I am forced to give this story a 6 out of 10. For more details on why I gave out this score, read my PM which gives out more information why some people like Arty B. Good and myself do not like this story.
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| Isabella chapter 36 . 1/13/2013
Best KND love story ever! Yay numba 3&4! Yay numba 2&5! Yay numba 1& Rachel! No sequel this was fanfictous enough! Loved it! Keep on writing!
| Isabella chapter 28 . 1/12/2013
| NumBaH-OnE chapter 36 . 12/3/2012
do you know when the sequel will start coming out and what is the name going to be
| taking it easy chapter 27 . 11/25/2012
I officially hate Stacey...
| taking it easy chapter 23 . 11/25/2012
Gotta say, I'm siding with Wally. He's in trouble because he lied to Kuki, but he's done that before. Why should Kuki be upset now? And if it's because Wally is going to the dance with Stacey, who Kuki hates; Kuki is going to the dance with Danny, who Wally hates. So Kuki can't talk. Especially since I think Kuki only hates her because ONE: She hits on Wally, and TWO: She keeps forgetting her name on purpose. But Wally, sharing Kuki's first reason, also hates Danny because he heard him say that stuff in the locker room. So Wally has reason to hate. Besides if this is about Wally not being able to share his feeling, what the heck, because he never shares his feelings. He even had trouble with it when trying to pretend to be Mr. Huggykins, when saying it wouldn't really mean anything. So that makes no sense. If it's for Wally not apologizing, what does he have to apologize for? He didn't really do anything that he doesn't do ordinarily, he has a good reason for hating Danny, and he is still trying to make up for it. So, yeah. I'm siding with Wally.