Reviews for Decisions to be Made
Liberius chapter 1 . 7/23/2010
It's a fun story. I really enjoy the concept, but the execution of it is absolutely atrocious. Either a) slow down the pace of the tale and expound upon the body and various ideas (actually SHOWING the initial speech you built up to or b) pare down the story to the essential details. The importance of the brigade is that they act as foils, either to Kyon or to one another. Utilize that.
If the story drags on chapter 1 . 5/17/2010
then it's clear their is too much material for it to be a one shot.

Grow on the story and extended and pull it out of completion

The story itself is demanding you continue, that is, if it's obvious that the story drags.
UruExplorer DTC chapter 1 . 4/20/2010
For your first story, it reads like you've been writing for a long while. As for where to end, I'd say this particular chapter ended at just the right spot. Not too short and not too long. Just right for a prologue.

On the title, It caught my attention. That's what titles do, catch your attention; It works well. I don't know what else I can comment on, really, it's all good! Keep up the good work!

~Cal
Personplacethingy chapter 1 . 4/19/2010
This story is great! I would very much like to see a continuation of this if you could!