|Reviews for Nausicaa Valley Of The Wind Love Story|
| Guest chapter 1 . 3/3/2014
I agree and no offence but this story is poorly written this could be an amazing story but u should do ur research lots of the names are spelled incorrectly and it went by way to fast this story has incredible potential it just needs a little work
First off more descriptive details, get people to fall in love the story and it's characters
Second add chapters, like deticate one chapter to the very beginning, where nausicaa and asbel decide to rebuild and nausicaa finds out she's pregnant and so forth,give the story length
Third have fun don't rush through it, this plot has fabulous potential, don't ruin it!
I'm only trying to help and I mean no hurtfulness in this review I'm only giving pointers
| LostJacket chapter 1 . 10/9/2010
i do believe his name is Asbel. Not Assbel.
i agree will the first person who reviewed the story needs to be more indepth.
this story really made my day. ASS-bel. serious lol
| MidnightCat 5 chapter 1 . 5/29/2010
Ok this story needs a lot of work (no offense) just trying to help out here
first of all you have told the story rather than showed the reader what is going on
so instead of the reader seeing pictures wen reading there r only words instead
in other words . . . more descriptive lang and dialogue
im also assumin that because this is a romance u want the reader to get emotionally involved or just engaged with the story
discriptive lang and characters thoughts and perspective help with this a lot
but if u simply trying to explain wot and how u think has happened between asbell and nausicca u've done a really good job it sounds very much like a science report
apart from the above i think the story line is good and that it could be really good with some more work on it!:)
luv MidnightCat 5