|Reviews for Framed|
| astrokath chapter 1 . 5/14/2010
First, this is in the wrong section - it's got nothing whatsoever to do with Anne McCaffrey's 'Freedom' series.
Second, is it even fanfic? If it's original fiction, you want to post it at Fictionpress, not FFN.
Third, applying some basic rules of formatting and grammar would HUGELY improve the readability of this snippet.