Reviews for Principles and Elements
Anon chapter 2 . 5/26
Hey! First I'd just like to say this is the second or third time I've read this story, as I really enjoy reading it, it's quite good! I also know that it's an older one and don't know if you still check it, but if you're still writing fanfics there was just one thing I noticed that's slightly annoying: you say Hiccup is smiling (in various ways, like grinning or lips twisting up) a LOT. Sometimes it's even 3 times a paragraph, which is a little weird because normally you'd assume that if he was smiling, he'd keep smiling for a little bit. Right now it just seems as if you're making him change expression constantly and I just feel like there are other transitions or verbs you could use instead, so you don't repeat yourself as often. I'm able to overlook this because I absolutely LOVE the storyline, but doing this would bring your story from a 9 to a 10 in my eyes :)
Kauia chapter 16 . 11/1/2016
Glad to be able to read this wonderful piece. Awesome idea. Awesome writing. Think it would be better to identify who is speaking sometimes. You describe Hiccup or Astrid by their hair mostly, making it difficult to know who you're talking about sometimes. Still good. Toothless is awesome. I love the humor and how much love it goes with Hiccup! Love the details. and Toothless and Hiccup are sound. I almost wish he has Toothless with him by law. haha. Looking forward to the sequel!
Septimus714 chapter 16 . 2/13/2016
Hey! Awesome story! Are you planning on adding any more chapters? Maybe some Hiccstrid?That would be epic. Maybe a sequel? Even more so epic!
ElizabethBathog chapter 16 . 1/29/2016
This was good and different from many other HTTAD! Awesome work! :)
Dakota.Crimson chapter 16 . 4/24/2015
I just had a quick look and it seems the sequel never eventuated, which is a shame.
Nevertheless I'm leaving this review to let you know how much I enjoyed reading this. It was very different to anything else I've read which was really interesting. I really loved your writing during the artistic scenes of Hiccup, I liked those scenes in particular.

PROVIDENCIA chapter 16 . 4/7/2015
Im going to give you a sugestion let someone else do the sequel please
bergmaster chapter 16 . 3/4/2015
This was surprisingly nice to read, given that I've never trusted modern AUs for HTTYD. I'm not sure if it's fav material, but it's still good.
I think it worked out nicely how everything was laid out, and the writing itself was very well done, but there are a few things that I think should have probably been covered better. I see now why this was placed in the Supernatural category, but I feel like I was introduced to the whole "this world has vampires and werewolves and 'magicians'" concept too late into the story - correct me I'm wrong and it was properly introduced better than "the bombers are werewolves". And are these creatures "normal" citizens with equal rights, but the Reserve was attacked by a band of outlaws? I also don't recall mention that the others had magical powers until near the end of the story. And seeing as they do, do all humans? Hiccup's mom? Or are the ones working at the Reserve not exactly human?
Just some questions that came up during my read.
Guest chapter 16 . 2/11/2015
LOL that is so sweet. Zalath actually came with him. I hope Hiccup gets to go back soon in the sequel so he can see Toothless.
Totally amazing turnout.

Spirit of Fury
Guest chapter 3 . 2/9/2015
Fantastic! The wording is less repetitive, flowing better!
Good job.

Spirit of Fury
Guest chapter 2 . 2/9/2015
I'm liking the story so far. The only thing that bugged me was grin. There are different smiles, and some with more than one description.
Sorry if I'm being too nit-picky.

Spirit of Fury
saraj8ne chapter 1 . 12/13/2014
Hey! What's the sequel of this story called so I can find it and read it?
Guest chapter 16 . 12/4/2014
Guest chapter 16 . 11/18/2014
Ok, so I'm probably really late for reviewing this but here goes: it was such a pleasure to read. Very exciting and well- written and AUs are something I'm wary about, but this was beautifully done. Thanks for writing it, you did great.
Jak Sandrow chapter 16 . 9/2/2014

There's a /SEQUEL/?

dun dun dunnnnnnnnn
Jak Sandrow chapter 14 . 9/2/2014
The end.

I read this in the space of a day. I just could not stop.

This story was one I had been looking for, for some time, now. I really /really/ want to gush about it, but that would be extremely unprofessional. So I will calmly state my opinion instead.

I am amazed at the complexity of this story, what with all the intertwining plotlines, etc, though there are a few things I'm still confused about. Maybe I was reading too fast, but I never really saw anything to do with /what/ Astrid was. /Is/ it mentioned?

I do have a bit of a something to grumble about. Just a little thing, promise. To me, including the 'back to school' note at the end was a little jarring, and it didn't really seem to relate to anything. I haven't read the other 2 chapters, though... Maybe my questions will be answered there?

Nevertheless, I will stop cluttering up your inbox with Review notifications. This is Jak Sandrow signing off with: I enjoyed this story very much.

- J.
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